The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.
"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this argument,the arguer cites the evidence that clearview should be the first choice for anyone who wants to retire, based on which is the assumption that clearview has spectacular natural beauty and a stable climate. Another piece of evidence presented to support the argument is that clearview’s housing costs have fallen sharply over the past year and its tax revenues are still lower than in neighbouring towns. Moreover, clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. most importantly, retirees in clearview will have access to quality care as they age because the number of physicians in the area far exceeds the national average. Furthermore, the arguer takes it granted that clearview is a good place for geomancy. hence, the arguer draws the conclusion that retired people should come here for retirement. this argument is flawed in several aspects.
most obviously, the arguer assumes that clearview has spectacular natural beauty and a stable climate. However, no evidence is provided to support this assumption. we are only informed that there are spectacular natural beauty and a stable climate, but we don’t know what kind of climate is it. clearview is possible that this is a desert climate, full of sand, and it's spectacular, and it's also a very hot and dry climate. this enirnment is not suitable foe hunman being to live in. it's also possible that there are a lot of bugs, a lot of wild animals, a lot of bad security, a lot of disasters and so on that are not suitable for people to live in.
In addition, the arguer assumes that clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. The arguer fails to eliminate other possibilities that usually these mayors don't keep their word. because these mayors often say idealistic things when they're running for office, they're trying to get some votes, they're trying to help them get elected, and they don't actually do what they say.
Finally, the arguer assumes that retirees in clearview will have access to quality care as they age because the number of physicians in the area far exceeds the national average. the evidence provided in this argument is not sufficient to validate the assumption that there are mostly physicians, but older people generally need surgeons. The elderly generally have loose bones and are prone to fracture, thereby they may need more surgeons. Nevertheless, there are many physicians here, which may not be suitable for the elderly. Maybe the elderly still need to go to some developed cities outside the city to see the doctor, hence this place may not be suitable for the elderly.
To sum up, the conclusion lacks credibility because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the arguer claims. To make the argument more convincing, the author would have to provided more specific evidence concerning that the climate is suitable, educational resources have been built, medical equipment and surgeons are complete.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 506 350
No. of Characters: 2482 1500
No. of Different Words: 219 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.743 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.905 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.507 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 187 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.733 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.335 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.867 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.612 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...may not be suitable for the elderly. To sum up, the conclusion lacks credibil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, in addition, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2573.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 499.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15631262525 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65133517203 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462925851703 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 804.6 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1273614202 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.869565217 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6956521739 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13043478261 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22500457259 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654568194437 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708554900419 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114486747467 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0911098907042 0.0628817314937 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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