In the above argument the author concludes that he recommends investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is retail sale of home heating oil. His conclusion is based on a prediction that the demand for home heating oil will increase, which is further based upon many premises which the author has made to bolster his claim.
The author exclaims that most homes in north-eastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as a major fuel for heating. This is actually a background information which further requires much more data to explain that exactly how many homes and how many parts of these region where winters are typically cold are domicile, so that it can be identified that how much demand is there for heating oil.
Furthermore, he claims that the region experienced 90 days with below normal temperatures, climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. It is generally known that the prediction of the weather forecasters is not strong and might change. Many times, the prediction of weather remains untrue, and the forecasters should be genuine enough or the source from where they are getting the information should me mentioned. May be due to global warming, the temperature might change or may be due to inauguration of industries and increase in population, the weather might get hotter. So, these assumptions provided by the author remains unwarranted and further more evidence and data are required, that how the heating oil demand will increase.
The author goes on telling that many new homes are being built in the region in response to recent population growth. An assumption is made here that due to increase in homes, the demand for heating oil will also increase. It can be that the new homes that are built will no longer need oils for heating purpose, might be there will be a new technique for heating such as air conditioners, etc. And even due to increase in population the environment of the region might get hotter in a few years, and thus the demand for oil might get stopped. To bolster the author’s claim, he needs to provide more information regarding the homes that are built and the statistics of the population growth recently and in future.
Therefore, the evidences which the author provided to bolster his claim remains vague as it is based on many assumptions, such as climate forecasters prediction, increased in population growth and building of new houses, which are proving unwarranted. And also regarding the investment in consolidated industries the author should provide more information as it is assumed that the investment in those industries could make a profit. To bolster his claim the author should provide more information as stated in the above paragraphs.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 466 350
No. of Characters: 2322 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.646 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.983 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.709 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.191 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.378 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.614 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.151 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 301, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this region' or 'these regions'?
Suggestion: this region; these regions
...ly how many homes and how many parts of these region where winters are typically cold are do...
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Line 7, column 710, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...s of the population growth recently and in future. Therefore, the evidences which the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, furthermore, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2383.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 466.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11373390558 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80877351872 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427038626609 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 737.1 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0308306491 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.176470588 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4117647059 23.324526521 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52941176471 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17207982315 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659171282649 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951260175052 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115392849287 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108401821735 0.0628817314937 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.