The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College."To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current

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The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

In the memo, the director suggests Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories to serve the housing needs of students. To substantiate the recommendation, he/she makes assumptions by citing the current trends of enrollment and average rent. While the argument is well-intentioned, in the absence of some crucial evidence it is barely unpersuasive.

First, based on the current trends of student enrollment, the arguer infers that the number of students will double over the next 50 years. However, this might not be a case in that the inference might be problematic in two aspects. First of all, the argument provides only the growth speed of involvement at present; however, the arguer fails to provide any evidence to prove that growth is representative of that for the next 50 years. Perhaps the future grows otherwise. Besides, the deduced data concerns about the future problem, yet we are not informed of whether the existing dormitory space inadequate or redundant. Chances are that there are idle dormitories in the moment. In short, without sufficient evidence to rule out these possibilities, the director cannot substantiate that the housing space is inadequate over next 50 years.

Moreover, the argument treats a lack of evidence that students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing as constituting sufficient proof that they will not. He/she unfairly assumes that the rise of apartment rent must affect the students without taking the financial situation, scholarship, personal choice of students into consideration. Thus, lacking evidence ruling out this possibility, the conclusion of making students feeling difficult to afford is untenable.

Besides, the director states that the prospective students are more likely to be attracted by new dormitories. However, the assumption cannot be justified by lacking evidence proving students tend to choose a university based on the housing condition rather than the other important features such as the employment rates of graduates and the education quality. Therefore, the assumption cannot be assured unless providing those evidence.

In conclusion, the director’s conclusion is suspicious. To better evaluate the argument, all of the above-mentioned evidence is definitely needed. A wise decision is always based on careful scrutiny and concrete, convincing proof, not unclear, unwarranted assumptions and anticipations.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 669, Rule ID: IN_THE_MOMENT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'at the moment' (=currently)?
Suggestion: at the moment
...ces are that there are idle dormitories in the moment. In short, without sufficient evidence ...
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Line 9, column 95, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...cious. To better evaluate the argument, all of the above-mentioned evidence is definitely ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in conclusion, in short, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2080.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 367.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66757493188 5.12650576532 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15390593244 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553133514986 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.3764341925 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.473684211 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3157894737 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26315789474 5.70786347227 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212022006302 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627344965178 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10793350077 0.0701772020484 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117460517264 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0909629293887 0.0628817314937 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 48.3550499002 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.5979740519 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.32208582834 113% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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