In the given memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College states that Buckingham College should build copious number of new dormitories which would eventually attract students to enroll at Buckingham. To buttress his/her argument, the memo adduced by providing an explanation which indicates that in coming 50 years of time the existing domitory space will be indequate and renting apartment will be dear for students ensuing difficult to afford off-campus housing.Hence, before the recommendation can be properly evaluated there certain things that needs to be addressed and explained.
First of all, with the aggrandization enrollment of students at current time we can not forecast the future. Perhaps Buckingham College would probably have lose it's charm in the following years. For example, At this moment students might have been attracted to the Buckingham College because of it's facilities , faculties and administration which would probably change in the coming 50 years of time. If either of these statements has some merit, then the argument presented by the author is weakened.
Secondly, Increase in the price of the apartment in recent years might have been caused due to other reasons. The author in argument prematurely assumes that wax in the price of apartments in the area of Buckingham College is due to the more enrollment of the students. For example, may be the water facilities and environment around the area is the resaon for the sudden increase in the price of apartments. If the above statement is true than, the argument of the author doesn't hold any water.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to it's reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to offer more evidence on the above quandaries (perhaps in the form of more systematic flow of research) then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the above recommendation.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 317 350
No. of Characters: 1603 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.22 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.057 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.829 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.417 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.453 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.38 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 343, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ndicates that in coming 50 years of time the existing domitory space will be inde...
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Line 1, column 486, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hence
... difficult to afford off-campus housing.Hence, before the recommendation can be prope...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 156, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'lost'.
Suggestion: lost
... Buckingham College would probably have lose its charm in the following years. For e...
^^^^
Line 2, column 309, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ingham College because of its facilities , faculties and administration which wou...
^^
Line 2, column 321, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ge because of its facilities , faculties and administration which would probably ...
^^
Line 3, column 473, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...s true than, the argument of the author doesnt hold any water. In conclusion, the arg...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 126, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nce on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to offer more eviden...
^^
Line 4, column 170, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he author is able to offer more evidence on the above quandaries perhaps in the f...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 314.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1974522293 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94647643059 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531847133758 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.1472255567 57.8364921388 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.0 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1666666667 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.70786347227 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307851643723 0.218282227539 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108809386876 0.0743258471296 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.178417177384 0.0701772020484 254% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166036612753 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148191504766 0.0628817314937 236% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.3799401198 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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