The following appeared in a memo from the Mayor of the city of Hillview.
"In order to alleviate the serious unemplyment problem in our town, we should encourage. Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing.
The argument in which the Mayor of the city of Hillview concludes that they should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in their area. The reason is to alleviate the serious unemplyment in their town. Also it will put to work thousands of Hillview residents who were left unemplyed after Computech company abandoned them. The mayor has asked the council to authorize campaign to attract the company and tax incentives to autotech.The argument, at first looks convincing, but when we study deeply, we encounter a lot of loopholes.
The first and the most significant loophole of the argument is that How can Hillview residents, who used to work for a computer software programming company, now work for an automobile manufacturing company? These people, who are coders, will have no knowledge of the automobiles and On what basis has the Mayor concluded that the jobs will be given to them? The residents would not be able to work in this field, as they have no experience in it. Also the Mayor wants them to be employed in building and staffing work, which is way different from the work, they do in the computer software company.
The second loophole is that the Mayor suggests that the perfect site for the automobile manufacturing plant is a landfill which is undeveloped for decades. How can they develop a manufacturing plant on a landfill? Also a landfill which is undeveloped would'nt be a safe palce for the workers. Why was the landfill undeveloped for decades? There must be some reason like the building work would not have support or the previous attempts of raising a building there may have failed. Thus an automobile manufacturing plant cannot be developed at such a site due it it's inconsistencies.
Furthermore, the Mayor tells that he will be asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and also offer significant tax incentives to make their town attractive to this car manufacturing company. What is the proof that the company will agree to develop a plant in their town? What if tax incentives are not enough to attract the company to their town? If the company is getting better offer at some other town, it might switch to that town instead. Thus the Mayor should do more research on other towns, who are also competing for this company.
The argument can be strengthened by answering the above questions. Also the Mayor should take a poll in their town, to ask the residents if they are willing to work for such company. To add to this, the Mayor should try and search for a computer softer programming company, as it will attract majority of the residents. If these points can be kept in mind then the argument can be made convincing. As it stands, however the argument is flawed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... the serious unemplyment in their town. Also it will put to work thousands of Hillvi...
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... company and tax incentives to autotech.The argument, at first looks convincing, bu...
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...ly, we encounter a lot of loopholes. The first and the most significant loophole...
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...le manufacturing company? These people, who are coders, will have no knowledge of the a...
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...ield, as they have no experience in it. Also the Mayor wants them to be employed in ...
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...op a manufacturing plant on a landfill? Also a landfill which is undeveloped wouldnt...
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...l? Also a landfill which is undeveloped wouldnt be a safe palce for the workers. Why wa...
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...ising a building there may have failed. Thus an automobile manufacturing plant canno...
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...hened by answering the above questions. Also the Mayor should take a poll in their t...
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...mpany. To add to this, the Mayor should try and search for a computer softer programmin...
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...will attract majority of the residents. If these points can be kept in mind then t...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'thus']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.247582205029 0.25644967241 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.179883945841 0.15541462614 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0444874274662 0.0836205057962 53% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0406189555126 0.0520304965353 78% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0483558994197 0.0272364105082 178% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0986460348162 0.125424944231 79% => OK
Participles: 0.0386847195358 0.0416121511921 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.77771104875 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0425531914894 0.026700313972 159% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.131528046422 0.113004496875 116% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0406189555126 0.0255425247493 159% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.027079303675 0.0127820249294 212% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2771.0 2731.13054187 101% => OK
No of words: 475.0 446.07635468 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.83368421053 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.298947368421 0.378187486979 79% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.263157894737 0.287650121315 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.204210526316 0.208842608468 98% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.115789473684 0.135150697306 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77771104875 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 207.018472906 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.425263157895 0.469332199767 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.4410986077 52.1807786196 91% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.039408867 120% => OK
Sentence length: 19.7916666667 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0294032887 57.7814097925 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.458333333 141.986410481 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7916666667 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.724660767414 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 3.58251231527 335% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 46.1074561404 51.9672348444 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.43165467626 1.8405768891 78% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.543966164279 0.441005458295 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.138790049211 0.135418324435 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0983041093939 0.0829849096947 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.557568207428 0.58762219726 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.143622162064 0.147661913831 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.226135421818 0.193483328276 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137327990392 0.0970749176394 141% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.439492618026 0.42659136922 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.11704762492 0.0774707102158 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.401287996816 0.312017818177 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121592295769 0.0698173142475 174% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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