An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument that the government of Tagus nation should promote the new type of millet to combat vitamin A deficiency is flawed. In the argument, the author not only draws conclusion based on the assumption that the new type of millet is high in vitamin A but also people would adapt to this new variety as millet is their staple food. Furthermore, the author makes the mistake of not providing proper evidence for the international development organisation engineering this new breed of millet.
To begin, the conclusion is based largely on the perception that the new variety of millet is high in vitamin A. The author has nowhere proof of it. On what basis has it been proved that the new variety is high on vitamin A? Where were these tests conducted? What were the results? Were all results positive that it is rich in vitamin A? If answers to these questions were provided then the argument would be of some logic.
To add to it, the author assumes that people of Tagus nation would adapt to this new variety since it is their staple food. But if this new variety is costly would common people be able to buy it? Won't they resort to some other source of vitamin A instead? Since the seeds cost more the farmers would have second thoughts on whether should plant them or no. Even if government is planning on giving farmers subsidies will the farmers make use of these subsidies for millet farming? What if they use it for farming some other crop? If people are not able to buy this new variety of millet then there is not point in promoting it.
Also,the author has not given enough evidence about the basis on which has the international development organisation engineered this new variety of millet. Why has it only given this new variety of millet as the possible solution? Why have they not considered other crops which might also be rich in vitamin A as the solution to the deficiency of vitamin A in Tagus nation? If sufficient proof as to why this organisation have suggested this millet, it would lead to more awareness among people and it would help government in promoting it further.
The argument would be strengthened if the government would have taken a survey of people and asked for their opinion whether they be happy with accepting this new variety of millet in their diet.Not only this, the government should also conduct a poll among farmers whether they will be able to farm this new variety. After this survey is conducted the results should be given as evidence.As it stands the argument is flawed for the reasons indicated.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: A_BUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'a bit'?
Suggestion: A bit
...e new type of millet is high in vitamin A but also people would adapt to this new var...
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Line 3, column 339, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... positive that it is rich in vitamin A? If answers to these questions were provide...
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Line 5, column 247, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[1]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
... resort to some other source of vitamin A instead? Since the seeds cost more the farmers ...
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Line 5, column 532, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hey use it for farming some other crop? If people are not able to buy this new var...
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Line 7, column 5, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...re is not point in promoting it. Also,the author has not given enough evidence ab...
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Line 9, column 54, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had taken'?
Suggestion: had taken
...would be strengthened if the government would have taken a survey of people and asked for their ...
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Line 9, column 196, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Not
...his new variety of millet in their diet.Not only this, the government should also c...
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Line 9, column 390, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...the results should be given as evidence.As it stands the argument is flawed for th...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'as to']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.241164241164 0.25644967241 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.16632016632 0.15541462614 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0831600831601 0.0836205057962 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.04158004158 0.0520304965353 80% => OK
Pronouns: 0.047817047817 0.0272364105082 176% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.139293139293 0.125424944231 111% => OK
Participles: 0.045738045738 0.0416121511921 110% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.47999303066 2.79052419416 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.029106029106 0.026700313972 109% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.120582120582 0.113004496875 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.033264033264 0.0255425247493 130% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.018711018711 0.0127820249294 146% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2562.0 2731.13054187 94% => OK
No of words: 450.0 446.07635468 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69333333333 6.12365571057 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.57801047555 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.315555555556 0.378187486979 83% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.22 0.287650121315 76% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.128888888889 0.208842608468 62% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0866666666667 0.135150697306 64% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47999303066 2.79052419416 89% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 207.018472906 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.38 0.469332199767 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 41.5530979269 52.1807786196 80% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.039408867 115% => OK
Sentence length: 19.5652173913 23.2022227129 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7818500101 57.7814097925 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.391304348 141.986410481 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5652173913 23.2022227129 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.347826086957 0.724660767414 48% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 3.58251231527 223% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 41.5652173913 51.9672348444 80% => OK
Elegance: 1.66666666667 1.8405768891 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.473065370563 0.441005458295 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.185063058449 0.135418324435 137% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.108696142098 0.0829849096947 131% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.534403794927 0.58762219726 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.167881984456 0.147661913831 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.181383702452 0.193483328276 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103718381882 0.0970749176394 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.468172597449 0.42659136922 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0438619143287 0.0774707102158 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.343347017681 0.312017818177 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751747845296 0.0698173142475 108% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 5.36822660099 149% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 14.657635468 130% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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