The following appeared in a memorandum from the business department of the Apogee Company:
“When the Apogee Company had all its operations in one location, it was more profitable than it is today. Therefore,
the Apogee Company should close down its field offices and conduct all its operations from a single location. Such
centralization would improve profitability by cutting costs and helping the company maintain better supervision of all
employees.”
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.
The memorandum from the buisness department of the Apogee Company claims that by closing the company's feild offices and conducting all its operations from a single location they will be able to increase the company's profits. The claim is supported by the fact that the company was more profitable in the past when it was cenralized and that centralization would lead to lower costs and better oversight of the employees. The argument presented has a flawed line of reasoning. The following paraghaphs will discuss why.
The memorandum claims that since the company was more profitable when it was centralized, centralization would increase the profitibility of the comapany. This line of reasoning is flawed as it assumes that centralization was cause of the profitibility. It is possible that when company was profitable in the past it was may have been because of other reasons like better economic enviroment, govenment subsidies or high sales.
Additionaly the memorandum claims that centralization would improve profitibility by reducing costs and improving oversights of the employess. This argument doesn't consider the benifits of having feild offices and operation. It assumes that there is no financial benifit of having feild offices. It is possible that by having the feild offices the comapany is able to increase sales and lower supply chain costs. To substanciate the argument the authors must provide evidenct that the benifits of the having feild offices are outweighed by the savings from centralization.
Thus the argument that the company should close it feild offices to increase its profits is very fragile. As diccused in the pragraphs above the argument fails to establish centralization as a cause of profitiblity and that cost savings from centralization will offset the benifits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... and better oversight of the employees. The argument presented has a flawed line of...
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...esented has a flawed line of reasoning. The following paraghaphs will discuss why. ...
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...owing paraghaphs will discuss why. The memorandum claims that since the compan...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...rsights of the employess. This argument doesnt consider the benifits of having feild o...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...y the savings from centralization. Thus the argument that the company should cl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 284.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41197183099 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07448005258 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 204.123752495 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457746478873 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3749253214 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.785714286 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.21428571429 5.70786347227 21% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246169327999 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811060069004 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999355203624 0.0701772020484 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16346077991 0.128457276422 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109896877181 0.0628817314937 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.