The following appeared in a memorandum from the manager of WWAC radio station.
"To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area, but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving here after their retirement. We must make listeners of these new residents. We could switch to a music format tailored to their tastes, but a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music suggests limited interest in music. Instead we should change to a news and talk format, a form of radio that is increasingly popular in our area."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The prompt urges the intention of the manager of WWAC radia station - to replace their musical format of with the format of news and talk-shows. The logical flaws beneath the implicit assumption of the manager are pointed below, only to be followed by the clarification of those assumptions in order to come to a culmination.
1. Increase in the number of resident will definitely arise the demand of respective musics of the abiders.
2. The new resident are not interested enough to hear rock music.
3. Decline in local sells of musics traansparents the idea that the overall demand of musics is on downside.
4. Replacing the musics with format of talkshows will adduce the revenues of the radio station; has been haulted recently beause of steep decline in the demand of music.
To begin with - the manager is too quick to assume that increase in residents, mostly people who are retired - meant to say overaged; are less likely to hear rock-music, which in turn are declining the demand of it. But a special point to present - there is nothing said in the prompt about the previous customers of the radio station. Did they left the radio station or they are still interested enough to hear musics from the WWAC radio station. If the the previous customers' interest into the rock musics did not las long and they left the radio station and those customers are replaced by the newly arrived aged customers - then it might be the reason for the decline of rock music in the radio station. But what if that is no the case. In fact, what if the previous customers are attached to the radio station and still are listening to their favourite ones? Then the decline in rock musics enthusiasists is something about to happen and thus we might criticise the remark that the rock musics is in the decline because of the disparity in tastes of the newly arrived residents.
Also, it is not cleared form the passage about how long before the residents have arrived. Are they accustomed enough to all the raio station's shows or else. It might happen that the residents have tranferred recently and are not pretty much used to any kind of modern day musics. But does that necessarily mean thay will not be in future. What if later it is found out that the residents are quite smart actually to relieve with the young generation and are preferbly liking the rock musics. In that case, it will be nothing but flaw to assume to better change the musics tailored to other forms.
Apart from that - it is conjectured that decline in local sales of recorded musics is actually the fact of the decreasing demand of that music. Bu the manager is missing quite a few points here. May be most of the new residents are not comfortable in hearing recorded musics. May be the arriced age-old residents are not acknowledged sincerely regarding the sale of those musics and who know, they might be ruptured to buy those sales of musics once they are comfortable with the rock musics providing sufficient time to them.
So, looking at overall points and clarifications of the aforementioned assumptions, it might not be a good idea to come to any conclusion without proper critical remarks and evidences to be convinced that the rock music formats are to be replaced with that of news and talk shows.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 573 350
No. of Characters: 2646 1500
No. of Different Words: 244 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.893 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.618 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.485 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.464 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.211 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.262 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.467 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 346, Rule ID: DID_PAST[2]
Message: Did you mean 'leave'?
Suggestion: leave
...ustomers of the radio station. Did they left the radio station or they are still int...
^^^^
Line 9, column 452, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... musics from the WWAC radio station. If the the previous customers interest into the ro...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 452, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... musics from the WWAC radio station. If the the previous customers interest into the ro...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 729, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... the radio station. But what if that is no the case. In fact, what if the previous...
^^
Line 11, column 330, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... that necessarily mean thay will not be in future. What if later it is found out that the...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 281, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...ortable in hearing recorded musics. May be the arriced age-old residents are not a...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, look, may, regarding, so, still, then, thus, apart from, in fact, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 19.6327345309 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 93.0 55.5748502994 167% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2718.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 573.0 441.139720559 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74345549738 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89258810929 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53419377784 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.42757417103 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 855.0 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5138746028 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.25 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.875 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.70833333333 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 5.15768463074 174% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257528353644 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749380063993 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599154731985 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110805648834 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619577169284 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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