The following appeared in a memorandum from the manager of WWAC radio station.
"To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area , but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving here after their retirement. We must make listeners of these new residents. We could switch to a music format tailored to their tastes, but a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music suggests limited interest in music. Instead we should change to a news and talk format, a form of radio that is increasingly popular in our area."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument
The author claims that rock-music format should be changed into the news and talk format. To support the conclusion, he cites various evidences such as continuing decline in local sales of recorded music and the population growth in their area is mainly from people moving after their retirement. Although these evidences appear to bolster the argument, a meticulous analysis will show otherwise. So the author needs to cite the following specific evidence to make the argument more sound.
First of all, the author assumes that people after retirement loves news and talk format more than rock-music. Perhaps, the declining number of listeners were due to the harsh and unpopular music played by the WWAC. It is possible that, retired people loves the rock-music, but eh WWAC plays, old and boorish music. If this was the case then, this case would significantly weakens the argument.
Second of all, the writer presumes that the timing of rock-music format is according to the people's taste. Perhaps, the timing of rock-music format is so absurd that people don't get time from their regular activities. Possibly, people love to do yoga in the morning and probably the rock-music format is in the morning. If this was the case then instead of changing the format, WWAC should focus on timing. Without this evidenced, going into the author's conclusion is unwarranted.
Third of all, the author, assumes that WWAC is just only one means to get time pass by the people. Possibly, there are other very way are coming to that region to spent time. For instance, if there were other popular concerts is organized daily in the region, perhaps, people are finding such live concert more entertaining than listening WWAC rock- music format. If this was the case, then it considerably weakens the author's conclusion.
In conclusion, it is possible that changing the format into news and talk format would rise the number of listeners. However, as it stands now, the argument relies on three unfounded assumptions that render the argument unpersuasive at best and specious at worst. Thus, to make the argument more sound, the author needs to provide additional evidences on above three fronts.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 361 350
No. of Characters: 1777 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.359 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.922 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.456 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.05 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.268 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.539 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'weaken'
Suggestion: weaken
...ase then, this case would significantly weakens the argument. Second of all, the wri...
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Line 5, column 174, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...k-music format is so absurd that people dont get time from their regular activities....
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Line 5, column 447, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... Without this evidenced, going into the authors conclusion is unwarranted. Third of ...
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Line 7, column 420, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... case, then it considerably weakens the authors conclusion. In conclusion, it is pos...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, then, third, thus, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1836.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 360.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54563291022 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.151134681 57.8364921388 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.8 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2207020567 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698474578995 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610146075663 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128136290849 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494656520362 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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