The owner of Movies Galore, recommends increasing the profits of his video rental store chain by implementing two changes that were previously tried at one of it sexisting locations. He came to this conclusion because closing the store early and reducing its movie count reduced operating costs at its downtown Marston store. However, to really evaluate the strength of this argument, we need to answer three questions.
First of all, are the other stores located in similar locations as the downtown Marston location, where closing early helps reduce the costs? Maybe the other stores are located in more suburban settings, where you can expect more people to visit them on their way from work, which usually ends at 5-6pm. The downtown location is expected to have less people frequenting it after business hours as people head home, but the opposite thing can be said for the suburban stores, which expect more flux as people head home and stop at the movie store on the way home. If this the case, then this greatly weakens the owner's argument.
Secondly, is last month a typical month for the downtown Marston store's operating expenses? In other words, would you expect every month's operating expenses to be similar to last month's? It may be the case that last month was an unusually hot and humid August, for a city that experiences very moderate weather. This could have considerably increased the cost of the AC and electricity needed to keep the inside ambient at a tolerable level. Now that it is September and the temperature subsided, we could finally see a decrease in those operating costs. If this is true, then the argument is, again, flawed.
Thirdly, did the store lose revenue and customers as a result of eliminating all the movies that are 5 years or older? Some classics, such as "Star Wars", "Lord of the Rings", or the "Harry Potter", hold a considerable loyal fan base that will continue to shop for those movies, no matter the year it is. Getting rid of these fan favorites may backfire, as their bottom line will suffer and they will lose even more revenue. If this is also true, then it significantly weakens the author's argument.
To conclude, the author's argument depends on two highly flawed arguments that even if they hold weight, they are not certain to work in the other store locations. If the author is able to answer the three questions delineated above, it will help evaluating the feasibility of this solution. Knowing more about the nature of the operating expense, the stores locations, and its customer base's preference, will help the author make a better informed decision.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... previously tried at one of it sexisting locations. He came to this conclusion be...
^^
Line 2, column 347, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...e downtown location is expected to have less people frequenting it after business ho...
^^^^
Line 2, column 612, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'owners'' or 'owner's'?
Suggestion: owners'; owner's
...the case, then this greatly weakens the owners argument. Secondly, is last month a t...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 512, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...true, then it significantly weakens the authors argument. To conclude, the authors ar...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 19, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...he authors argument. To conclude, the authors argument depends on two highly flawed a...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 247, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to evaluate' or 'evaluate'.
Suggestion: to evaluate; evaluate
...uestions delineated above, it will help evaluating the feasibility of this solution. Knowi...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, such as, as a result, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2211.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 445.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96853932584 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58712494926 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555056179775 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1364172483 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.55 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135649206051 0.218282227539 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0394536404486 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533418272791 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.078475274055 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0771719696518 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... previously tried at one of it sexisting locations. He came to this conclusion be...
^^
Line 2, column 347, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...e downtown location is expected to have less people frequenting it after business ho...
^^^^
Line 2, column 612, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'owners'' or 'owner's'?
Suggestion: owners'; owner's
...the case, then this greatly weakens the owners argument. Secondly, is last month a t...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 512, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...true, then it significantly weakens the authors argument. To conclude, the authors ar...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 19, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...he authors argument. To conclude, the authors argument depends on two highly flawed a...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 247, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to evaluate' or 'evaluate'.
Suggestion: to evaluate; evaluate
...uestions delineated above, it will help evaluating the feasibility of this solution. Knowi...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, such as, as a result, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2211.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 445.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96853932584 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58712494926 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555056179775 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1364172483 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.55 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135649206051 0.218282227539 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0394536404486 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533418272791 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.078475274055 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0771719696518 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.