While I do believe that competition has continually pushed the human race to better itself, cooperation provides significant advantages to advance our societies. I mostly agree with the prompt for two reasons.
Of course, a healthy dose of competition will more often than not foster improvement. Unfortunately, young people today face significantly more different problems than our primal ancestors who were constantly fighting for food, shelter, and protection against nature. We have eliminated our most basic issues and there is an abundance of each of those resources for all humans. We need not compete for what once were limited resources and we now can focus on eradicating disease, the environment, and technological advancement. These issues are of considerable difference to what we once faced as early as the 20th century. Thus, by cooperating with each other we can significantly cut the time needed to achieve the betterment of our societies.
First, the main issues faced by the young people of the world today have become bigger and more complex and require all the resources that can be mustered. For instance, global warming is a problem that will lead to an imminent disaster unless all humans cooperate and contribute to solving it. There is no room for competition there, and uniting towards this common goal is the only way to achieve the survival of our planet. Similarly, eradicating disease and preventing a global epidemic are serious concerns for our species. Dividing the resources and competing with each other, will have a detrimental effect on the fate of all humans. Therefore, due to the nature and complexity of the world today and in the future cooperation is the only solution.
To conclude, as times have changed our main problems have shifted from fighting to secure our individual survival to securing the prosperity of our whole species. Therefore as a community, we should be all thinking to better our whole society's lives, and our own with it, by working together and fighting united.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 163, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, similarly, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1701.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 330.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15454545455 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87458225495 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554545454545 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.355975383 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.3125 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0953028977974 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0367040030423 0.0831039109588 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0318547829539 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0599702075175 0.150359130593 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266859210623 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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