The following appeared in a newsletter offering advice to investors:
“Techcorporation is our top pick for investment this term. We urge all of our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed satellite technology has been approved by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. That company is Techcorporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not a monopoly. Thus, the new venture of Techcorporation into satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.
The conclusion of this prompt is to advice investors and client to invest in Techcorporation which is a FTA satellite approved provider based on some consumer survey carried out. It would be unwise for these clients to invest in this company without considering carefully the state and unstated assumptions in this prompt. The conclusion is quite flawed and some considerations need to be put inplace before client invests.
Firstly, The prompt clearly relies on the fact that the consumer survey shows more than enough reason for the clients to invest in techcorporation. This line of reasoning is flawed as we dont know the kind of questions asked in the survey that would infer people are dissatisfied with their current provider. It might just be that they are dissatified with the current customer support or just the payment plan, this is not enough premise for one to conclude that such consumer would want to leave and opt for another service or satellite provider. If this survey isn't carried out to meticulously and well detailed, it would be hard to make a conclusion based on the aforementioned premise
Futhermore, the prompt clearly states that 80 percent of the respondent showed they were dissatisfied with the current satellite providers. 80 percent of respondents might be a very insignificant proportion of the whole satellite provider. It might just be that 100 consumer of the whole 200 million consumers responded and taking the response of 80 people out of the 200 million people using this service can be a very ridiculous action. The clients need to justify this number and be sure that the 80 percent of those that responded that they were dissatisfied with this service are actually a very significant compared to the whole consumer group.
Finally, The prompt strongly, states that Techcorporation is approved by FTA so as to come off as a strong ground to the clients. FTA needs to be clearly studied, Are they a governing body for satellite providers?, Are they widely known? and do they have a strong say in the decision making for consumers to shift from their current providers?. these questions need to be answered by the clients before making a capricious decision on whether to invest or not. Answering positive to the question can be a strong point for the clients to invest but if negative, other assumptions need to be fully studied before investing.
In conclusion, The premise for the conclusion is fully flawed the above points and assumptions need to be studied, reviewed and understood before investors put a chunk load of money in Techco
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 433 350
No. of Characters: 2119 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.562 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.894 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.778 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.867 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.404 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.63 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...invest in Techcorporation which is a FTA satellite approved provider based on som...
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Line 5, column 188, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... This line of reasoning is flawed as we dont know the kind of questions asked in the...
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Line 5, column 565, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...e or satellite provider. If this survey isnt carried out to meticulously and well de...
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Line 13, column 78, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...that Techcorporation is approved by FTA so as to come off as a strong ground to the clie...
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Line 13, column 239, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...lite providers?, Are they widely known? and do they have a strong say in the decisi...
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Line 13, column 346, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: These
...to shift from their current providers?. these questions need to be answered by the cl...
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Line 17, column 62, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...emise for the conclusion is fully flawed the above points and assumptions need to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, firstly, if, so, well, as to, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2171.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 432.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02546296296 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84662275382 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428240740741 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3090276625 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.6875 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 23.324526521 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1875 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165142320557 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697308853357 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554673897954 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106137347718 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641779213155 0.0628817314937 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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