The following appeared in a newsletter offering advice to investors."Over 80 percent of the respondents to a recent survey indicated a desire to reduce their intake of foods containing fats and cholesterol, and today low-fat products abound in many f

Essay topics: The following appeared in a newsletter offering advice to investors.

"Over 80 percent of the respondents to a recent survey indicated a desire to reduce their intake of foods containing fats and cholesterol, and today low-fat products abound in many food stores. Since many of the food products currently marketed by Old Dairy Industries are high in fat and cholesterol, the company's sales are likely to diminish greatly and company profits will no doubt decrease. We therefore advise Old Dairy stockholders to sell their shares, and other investors not to purchase stock in this company."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.

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In the newsletter offering advice to investors, the author advises Old Dairy

stockholders to sell their shares and suggests to other investors not to buy

stocks from the company. The author cites the aparently negative response in the

survey, and the current high fat products of the companie as reasons to why

investors should stop interacting with Old Dairy Industries. However, before the

argument can be properly evaluated, three key questions must be answered.

First of all, what is the validity of the survey mentioned in the prompt? In

other words, are the results biased or unbiased? One possible reason that could

undermine the original assumption is that the newsletter was sponsored by

health oriented companies that are trying to persuade people into thinking that

investing in Old Dairy Industry is a bad idea. The news company might have received

a generous amount of money, and in trade, expect that news writers come up with an

article that leads people into shifting from fatty foods to more healthy options,

boosting sale in these companies. Therefore, if the above is true, then the

argument does not hold water.

Secondly, assuming that the survey is unbiased, how many people were involved in

the survey and where was the survey conducted? For instance, if the survey was

conducted at a region where people are into fitness and health, the outcome of the

survey will indicate that people tend to eat healthier, thus justifying the

results in the original argument. But, the survey will not reflect the reality of

the whole society. In order to garanty the validity of the argument, the survey

would have to have been more general. Another reason as to why the argument has

some flaws is that the author does not mention the ratio of high fat to low fat

foods from Old Dairy Industries, in fact, he only states that the company has many

fatty foods. This lessens the authenticity of the argument because we don´t know

which segment the company has the highest profits. Maybe the company has many more

low fat products that generate most of the companies income, suggesting that Old

dairy company is versatile and has numerous other foods that are sold widely. If

either of the ideas above are balid, then the original argument in the newsletter

is significantly weakened.

Last but not least, will people stop eating Old Dairy Industries foods just

because the survey showed that people desire to reduce their intake? This assumption

might show to be false. People might feel the need in lowering their

high-caloric food intakes but that does not meen that they will entirely stop

consuming these types of products. If this is the case, then the prompt has

significant problems.

In conclusion, the argument as it stands now, is significantly flawed due to its

reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the

three questions mentioned above and provide more evidence towards his point of

view, then the original statement can be properly evaluated.

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but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2630.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 503.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22862823062 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51816870645 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 204.123752495 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499005964215 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 782.1 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.0446680163 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.545454545 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8636363636 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 40.0 5.15768463074 776% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 46.0 5.25449101796 875% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168151655545 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447049615648 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483449754201 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0369691127928 0.128457276422 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507386327849 0.0628817314937 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 98.500998004 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 57 15
No. of Words: 503 350
No. of Characters: 2446 1500
No. of Different Words: 242 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.736 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.863 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.416 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 177 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 8.825 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.21 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.298 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.219 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.84 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 40 5

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