The following appeared in a newsletter offering advice to investors.
"Over 80 percent of the respondents to a recent survey indicated a desire to reduce their intake of foods containing fats and cholesterol, and today low-fat products abound in many food stores. Since many of the food products currently marketed by Old Dairy Industries are high in fat and cholesterol, the company's sales are likely to diminish greatly and company profits will no doubt decrease. We, therefore, advise Old Dairy stockholders to sell their shares, and other investors not to purchase stock in this company."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.
The topic was about advice to the old diary investors and stockholders to sell their shares because old dairy products contain high fat and cholesterol and a recent study shows reduce in consumption of fat and cholesterol food products. The argument is based on the following reasons and flawed for the following reasons.
first of all, the author provided eighty percent of the people in the survey responded that they try to reduce their fat and cholesterol intake, but the author does not provide the actual number of people took part in the survey. it would be possible that only fifty people took part in the survey. it would also possible that the people of a particular place took part in the survey, so trifle percent of people does not represent the whole demographic. it would be careless to conclude that because of some people response the sell of dairy products would be hindered. The author also told that low-fat products abound in many food stores, but again the author does not provide any significant data that provide his point is true.
Another claim the author made is that all dairy products contain high fat and cholesterol, but it might be possible that companies produce some low fat and cholesterol products and they were already popular in the market. As the author does not provide any data about profit and loss amount the dairies made in the previous year we could not conclude for sure. if the company already making a profit through the low-fat product then there is no need for stockholders to sell their shares. if people of a certain place again the fat consumption then the dairy company introduced low fat and cholesterol product.
To recapitulate the topic, the argument based on unwarranted reasons and failed to provide any convincing data that proves that the author was correct.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 311 350
No. of Characters: 1489 1500
No. of Different Words: 130 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.199 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.788 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.418 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 70 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 44.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.846 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.51 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.51 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.175 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
... and flawed for the following reasons. first of all, the author provided eighty perc...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...mber of people took part in the survey. it would be possible that only fifty peopl...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...y fifty people took part in the survey. it would also possible that the people of ...
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Line 2, column 455, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...es not represent the whole demographic. it would be careless to conclude that beca...
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Line 2, column 455, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...es not represent the whole demographic. it would be careless to conclude that beca...
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Line 3, column 362, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...us year we could not conclude for sure. if the company already making a profit thr...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... for stockholders to sell their shares. if people of a certain place again the fat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 55.5748502994 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 311.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86495176849 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46948687008 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 204.123752495 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.440514469453 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.0 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1544181574 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.083333333 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9166666667 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272850945069 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105746874105 0.0743258471296 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852567057486 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158181715733 0.128457276422 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0988789486991 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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