Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enoug

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Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

In the passage above, the disappearance of arctic deer in the Canadian arctic islands has been attributed to high temperatures in modern days. These deer have a pattern of jumping from island to island through sea ice that bridge them together. Local hunters have reported a decline in deer population and they conclude that this is due to deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across frozen sea. However, before the idea in the passage can be properly evaluated, three topics must be addressed.

First of all, it is safe to say that global warming is the only reason that artic dear population have declined in the last years? It is possible that hunters themselves are the main reason why encountering these animals in the wild have become increasingly more difficult. Let us assume that up to this point, local hunters have been very cautious with how they hunted these mammals. Despite their efforts, outside hunters have illegally been poaching these animals until few of them are left, harming their chances of surviving and procreating. This could explain why local hunters have seen a reduction in the number of these deer. If the above is true, then the argument does not hold water.

Secondly, the environmental changes in the last years may have brought new predators to the Canadian artic islands. Such global warming may have pushed predators like polar bears, into more tangential areas of the continent in search of food. Due to the fact that deer are now more constrained in fewer islands, polar bears have a better chance of hunting their prey. This might explain why some islands are less populated, either due to less migration or due to more predation from bears.

Last but not least, hunters might be searching in the wrong places. One possibility is that local hunters might have seen a recurrent pattern in the migration of deer that is not the norm for these animals. The statement makes clear that these arctic animals live in regions where it is warm enough to sustain plant growth during the course of the year. Since they were used to seeing these animals roam in the artic islands, once they realized that the number of deer was off, they misleadingly concluded that global warming, a popular trending subject nowadays, is the sole responsible for the decrease in the number of these mammals. If the argument has merit, then conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.

In conclusion, the argument, as it stands, is considerably flawed do to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the three topics above and offer more evidence, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the ideas in the passage.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 324, Rule ID: DURING_THE_COURSE_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'during'.
Suggestion: during
... is warm enough to sustain plant growth during the course of the year. Since they were used to seein...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2283.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 462.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94155844156 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52527561317 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519480519481 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8032736899 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.714285714 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04761904762 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20619548048 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586105539561 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681891544259 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107340163389 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794915214996 0.0628817314937 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 462 350
No. of Characters: 2225 1500
No. of Different Words: 235 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.636 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.816 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.449 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.464 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.526 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5