Governments should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and s

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Governments should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

“Give a man a fish and he will not be hungry for a day, teach the man how to fish and he won’t be hungry for life.” This is a quote that teaches us about the importance of learning, clearly the man that learned how to fish is capable of always doing so and can sustain himself for ever. The same way with education, the person that can take advantage of learning and apply to one’s life is better prepared to face the unknown than if he had not. The prompt states that people that can’t afford to pay for a higher education should be able to study for free. In my opinion, I mostly agree with the statement and the reason are as follows.

To begin, there are a lot of good students that come from poor families and thus are not able to attend a university. This is contradictory to the idea that everyone has the right to study, it is the duty of government to give opportunities for every citizen to study and improve their quality of life. For instance, in Brazil there are scholarship programs that grant financial aid for students that clearly have no condition to pay for university tuitions. For those students that managed to pass on the selection for federal institutes, the scholarship not only pays the expenses of education but also give a monthly stipend. This way, students don’t need to work and study at the same time, helping them focus in their courses. This is a win- win situations for both, the financial program helps the needed student during a shorter period and the student can successfully get his diploma much faster.

Further, it is known that having a higher degree diploma goes together with better opportunities and better jobs. Statistically, a former student that came from poverty and now has a diploma and a stable salary can, in theory, continue in this path, supporting his family and the next generations to succeed. This is a smart way to incrementally removing people from poverty. The mayor of Sao Paulo, one of the most important cities in Brazil, came from a poor family, he lived in a small house in the suburbs with his brothers and his mother. He was always very smart and was always one of the top students in his class throughout all his early years of school. The president at the time created a program that helped poor student with scholarships, and he was one of the chosen in that time. He became a lawyer, a very successful one to be precise, and after years of hard work and dedication, became rich and started helping others. He expanded the program during his term in office, with thousands of students being helped by the government.

Of course, there are some negative aspects to the equations. A lot of bad students may wind up in the program, taking places that could be occupied by students that would benefit from the program. The scholarship program, mentioned above, has become an efficient way for poor students to enter universities, however, at the same time, the number of vacancies for the university stay the same. In other words, really good students that otherwise would be studying in prestigious universities are now unable to attend because of poor students that were pushed inside the universities by study quotas.

In conclusion, it is beneficial for society to have the government backing up students that are not able to pay for their high degree studies. But, with everything in life, there is always a ‘not so good’ side to the solution. The best that to resolve this is by equilibrium.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion, of course, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 89.0 58.6224719101 152% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2908.0 2235.4752809 130% => OK
No of words: 614.0 442.535393258 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73615635179 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.977853291 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65779882179 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480456026059 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 909.0 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7527673706 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.32 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.56 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0947734337734 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0312972537843 0.0831039109588 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0258657713846 0.0758088955206 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0591732441656 0.150359130593 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205389122903 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 100.480337079 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.8971910112 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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