The following appeared in a newsletter offering advice to investors:
Techcorporation is our top pick for investment this tear. We urge all our client to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company tat has develped satellite technology has been approved by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. That company is Techcorporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not a monopoly. Thus, the new venture of Techcorporation into satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now.
In a newsletter offering advice to investors that the new venture of Techcorporation into satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest in it. But the reason that was given by them is not proper and made a huge gap between the claim and the conclusion.
First, For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed satellite technology has been approves by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. Statement suggest "For the first time in ten year". There may be many reason behind that, Has Satellite technology been not approved ago? They not give the full name of the approves techcorporation. Is this only the Techcorporation that approve other service provider? Or This techcorporation is not known so that they give approve to the satellite service. If they approve why not give the approbation before. Company try is for this last ten year. Or may be the service provided by the company has some defect so the after ten year no approbation they get.
A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of respondents where dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider. They talk about the last year consumer survey but not give the clear statement that where the survey that take place. Was it for a single region or city or state or country? They didn't clear this thing. Most importantly that who done this survey. Was that the national survey society or customer Service? They talk about the 80% of the customer that not satisfied with the current satellite television but not clear that from how many customer the 80% were not satisfied.
Another thing is that customer who dissatisfied with the service will switch to another provider but not conform that which provider. They may be switch to another provide because the service that give by the company is recently approved. They may be think of that this new company that provide the service were not approved till date. So why we will take this connection of TV. So the may not be take the service. The industry were not a monopoly. How they have a monopoly? If they have they only the provider of the service. But they just got the approval of the service. And they state that 80% of the customer are not satisfied with current service so that we can say that there are so many other companies that provide the services.
From these many gaps and lack in numeric data of the survey we can't get that this conclusion: The new venture of Techcorporation into the satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for investor. There are lots of big gaps that not give the support to the conclusion
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 12, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'surveys'.
Suggestion: surveys
... no approbation they get. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty pe...
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Line 5, column 627, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun customer seems to be countable; consider using: 'many customers'.
Suggestion: many customers
... television but not clear that from how many customer the 80% were not satisfied. Another ...
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Line 7, column 476, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t a monopoly. How they have a monopoly? If they have they only the provider of the...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'another thing']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233590733591 0.25644967241 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.150579150579 0.15541462614 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0694980694981 0.0836205057962 83% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0521235521236 0.0520304965353 100% => OK
Pronouns: 0.03861003861 0.0272364105082 142% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.121621621622 0.125424944231 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0289575289575 0.0416121511921 70% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.6501472702 2.79052419416 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.019305019305 0.026700313972 72% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.131274131274 0.113004496875 116% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.023166023166 0.0255425247493 91% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0328185328185 0.0127820249294 257% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2725.0 2731.13054187 100% => OK
No of words: 468.0 446.07635468 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.82264957265 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.303418803419 0.378187486979 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.252136752137 0.287650121315 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.17094017094 0.208842608468 82% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.115384615385 0.135150697306 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6501472702 2.79052419416 95% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 207.018472906 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.378205128205 0.469332199767 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 41.8789513572 52.1807786196 80% => OK
How many sentences: 30.0 20.039408867 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.6 23.2022227129 67% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5316941369 57.7814097925 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8333333333 141.986410481 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6 23.2022227129 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.2 0.724660767414 28% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 40.8136752137 51.9672348444 79% => OK
Elegance: 1.592 1.8405768891 86% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291431944476 0.441005458295 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.186015935019 0.135418324435 137% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.131903668042 0.0829849096947 159% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.495958503653 0.58762219726 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.179025920358 0.147661913831 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116712978504 0.193483328276 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869464494475 0.0970749176394 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.44447143039 0.42659136922 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0671922240236 0.0774707102158 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230984705151 0.312017818177 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.087626704374 0.0698173142475 126% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.87684729064 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.82512315271 249% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 5.36822660099 149% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 14.657635468 109% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More arguments wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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