The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument states that, to improve higher profit margine and growth, companies thould hire employees with lower sleep requirement. This argument does not consider many other aspects while arriving to the given conclusion.
The argument does not consider the fact that sleep requirements for humans is related to the respective age. Older people require less sleep than comparatively younger persons. Though, this might not be true for all people, but can be considered when generalizing the sleep requirement of employees or executives. The reason for lower average sleep requirement may be higher average age of the employees.
Also, we need to consider the overall productivity and work hours of the employee. It can be the case that all in the given company are much more qualified than the competition. It can also be the case that the employees are simply more hard working or work for long hours. This helps reduce person-hours and thus, costs, which increases profit margin. It might also be the case where employees are forced to work long hours and get less sleep. We can also consider that the executives are simply more productive.
Moreover, there can be the case where the study is biased and most of the employees who participated in the study have already lower sleep requirements.
There might be other factors which contribute to the success of the firm. These may include, a monopoly like business, where the mentioned firm is the only supplier of the product and thus, can have high profit margins. Also, there can be a case where the firm is in a highly profitable business.
We should not neglect the fact that employees or executives with higher sleep requirements may have even higher productivity as compared to their counterparts, who require less sleep.
Therefore, a firm should consider above mentioned factors while deciding to employee executives with lower sleep requirements. For a business to success, innovation is of paramount importance and thus, it is the innovation that should be of main focus, in the long term. Also, hiring employees with lower sleep requirements cannot garuntee higher profitability or growth, as we are not considering market scenario and productivity of the employees.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 363 350
No. of Characters: 1824 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.365 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.025 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.721 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.471 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.345 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 128, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'lowed', 'lowered'.
Suggestion: lowed; lowered
... participated in the study have already lower sleep requirements. There might be oth...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 241, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
... it is the innovation that should be of main focus, in the long term. Also, hiring employe...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 55.5748502994 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 363.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1652892562 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81067077891 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.440771349862 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 581.4 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2861162499 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.75 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.15 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100912813102 0.218282227539 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0389855998975 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331206575188 0.0701772020484 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0607730431393 0.128457276422 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329024266032 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.