The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The given argument presents a couple of assumptions to arrive at the conclusion that in order to succeed in business, people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night should be hired.
The argument has citied an example of a study on 300 male and female of mentian advertising executives and claims that upon studying 300 male and female advertising executives on the average number of hours they sleep, it was found that success of their firms have corelation with the number of hours they sleep. A careful analysis of the given argument brings into focus some aspects that have been ignored while framing the argument leading to a conclusion that sounds unconvincing. Let us now discuss each of these aspects individually.
Firstly, a major flaw in the argument is that there is absolutely no direct relation between sleeping for less than 6 hours and success of business. This assumptions appears to be completely iilogical. Success of business depends on good supply of chain, quality work conditions, management of the company, availability of raw material, profitability, availability of skilled and trained workforce, size of the company, experience of the employees. Moreover, success of Mentian advertising executives may be due to the conditions mentioned above instead of less sleep being a reason for their success. So, comaparison with advertising firms and their success was totally unsound.
Secondly, the company can by no means ensure that this less than 6 hours of sleep on part of executives would benefit the business. It might happen that employees will feel tired and exhausted on work due to lack of sleep and instead of working effectively they loose productivity.
This argument many have been strengthened had more evidence been included in the form of comparisions between working conditions of the firms, shift timings and duration of the executives, their family background. In its present form, due to lack of adequate evidence, the argument fails to convince the reader that the conclusion is justified.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...s than 6 hours and success of business. This assumptions appears to be completely ii...
^^^^
Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'appear'.
Suggestion: appear
...d success of business. This assumptions appears to be completely iilogical. Success of ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 330.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19090909091 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88666386731 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536363636364 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.1224462941 57.8364921388 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.769230769 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3846153846 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259581082743 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779276410172 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112596777484 0.0701772020484 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130571186101 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0963918411402 0.0628817314937 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...s than 6 hours and success of business. This assumptions appears to be completely ii...
^^^^
Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'appear'.
Suggestion: appear
...d success of business. This assumptions appears to be completely iilogical. Success of ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 330.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19090909091 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88666386731 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536363636364 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.1224462941 57.8364921388 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.769230769 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3846153846 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259581082743 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779276410172 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112596777484 0.0701772020484 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130571186101 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0963918411402 0.0628817314937 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.