The author of this argument states that if a business wants to record higher profit margins then it should hire people who need less than 6 hours of sleep only. This cannot be taken as an argument with a cogent base because the information given are not leading to it.
This study has been conducted for 300 female and male executives in advertising business. However, it does not unveil here the purpose of the study, how questions arranged in this study and under which circumstances the participants answered the questions. If the study was about work life balance of the executives, then they might have answered the study questions with that mindset. Also, executives might have varied sleeping requirements based on their gender, family and living condition which has not been uncovered in this study. Therefore, this study results cannot be used to reach to more specific assumption without knowing the study background.
Closely linked to the study, is the inaccurate assumption that the results of the study can be generalized to all the business. Also, on the study could have been conducted for 300 executives in the same advertising company. Therefore, firstly, it is not an accurate assumption to generalize the study results to all the advertising companies and other business in the country without giving out information about how the sample for the study is selected.
Secondly, the study was done for advertising executives whereas in the argument the result is once again generalized to any business which is not correct because depending on the particular business area the results for this study is likely to vary. For an example, employees in the bank field have different work hours and ethics than an advertising company which run and manage campaign ads. Therefore, it is clear that there is no accurate base for the author to lead the assumption that this study results speak for all the business but rather for advertising companies only.
Thirdly, the study is done for executives which is only a part of the hires in any company. They are usually motivational and goal-driven and wish for maximum productivity in the time they work. But, for rest of the levels in the company like entry-level managers, associates, interns, janitors etc, it will not require to have a less than 6 hours sleep time as a primary qualification to fit into the job. And having such an unjustified pre-requisite for new hires will paint a negative image about the companies among potential job seekers lowering its job demand. Again, it is clear that the author’s assumption here is far from being accurate.
Lastly, it is evident that the author has made several unwarranted assumptions, when reaching to the particular argument that companies should not hire people who are needing more than 6 hours of sleep.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 164, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...at companies should not hire people who are needing more than 6 hours of sleep.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, whereas, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2369.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 469.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05117270789 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73022702306 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460554371002 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 751.5 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6984047587 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.684210526 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6842105263 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192668913381 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703422806701 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432730516864 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10705782322 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273466966536 0.0628817314937 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 469 350
No. of Characters: 2304 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.654 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.913 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.661 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.684 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.131 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.608 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5