The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep th

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The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.

"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

As stated in the article of a business magazine, the author concludes that if a business wants to taste success it should strictly hire only the people needing less than six hours of sleep per night.
However, he does not have specific evidence and is assuming the conclusion on the basis of many unstated assumptions. The conclusion drawn by the author can be refuted by the help of the following three paragraphs.

Firstly, the author is too quick to assume that the study comprising the reporting of 300 advertising executives would also apply to the general posts of the company. For instance, perhaps the janitor of the business company need not have this quality to make a business prosper . Perhaps, the programmers need to have a sound long sleep to increase their creativity and productivity to excel. If either of this is true, the authors conclusion would not hold water.

Secondly, the author presumes that the executives reported to the study honestly and the data provided by them is credible. For example, perhaps the executives does not have proper devices to record their exact hours of sleeping time and thus data provided by them are tentative. Similarly, perhaps the study was conducted not in incognito so that their sleep time data may be influenced by different judgemental factors which dents the quality of data recorded. If either of this is right, the authors assertion is invalid.

Lastly, the author of the magazine generalizes that the sleep serves as the only criteria or quality of a personnel to make a business successful. For instance, the prosperity of a particular business might be totally based on the hard and focused work of their employee during work time and not the hour of sleep. Perhaps, the expertise and background experience of the employee is the main factor behind success of a company. If any of this is true, the authors suggestion is unwarranted.

In conclusion, the argument, presented by the authors is based on different unwarranted assumptions, is flawed as it stands. The authors conclusion : For a business to prosper, the people hired should exhibit the trait of sleeping less than 6 hours is based on the unwarranted assumptions like sleep as the only criteria t judge employees, the data of the report is credible and the generalization of the study data serves without evidences.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, honestly, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 392.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01275510204 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79839226213 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466836734694 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4494929712 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.588235294 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0588235294 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58823529412 5.70786347227 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163855958306 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051352455655 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476543504299 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0925517515435 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416885662034 0.0628817314937 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 392 350
No. of Characters: 1908 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.45 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.867 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.69 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.067 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.566 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5