The following appeared as part of the Dean’s newsletter:
"The University of Wabash is considering a community service requirement for all undergraduate and graduate students. We believe that the objective of any university is to produce well-rounded and charitable members of society. The proposed graduation requirement would be to complete at least 8 hours of unpaid community service per month for a total of 9 months. The Dean’s office will maintain a list of approved local charities on its website with contact information. This is a fantastic opportunity for students to give back to the community and gain real-world working experience. Most importantly, local charities in need will receive the help that they need to continue their efforts."
While the argument seems convincing, it is depenedent on certain assumptions like the students who complete the proposed unpaid community service time will become charitable members of the society, the students themselves will do the charity work without any subterfuge and that the students will gain real-world relevant working experience by doing charity work.
The univeristy imposes unpaid community service for atleast 8 hours per month for a total of 9 months as a requirement for graduation. It assumes that this prescribed time for community service will increase the humanity in students but it fails to consider the fact that most students complete this for the sake of graduating and not to develop their altruistic nature, which means that for most of them the motive will be to graduate and not to help others. When the students will not have a good motive to help others then the university's objective to produce charitable members of the society will be failed.
The argument also assumes that all the students will be aboveboard in completing the community service, but the university fails to understand that without proper supervision, some students will find a way to circumvent it . Hence, proper supervision and monitoring of students while they are performing the charity work is necessary for the university to succeed in this program.
The argument assumes that the charity can help students gain real world working experience but the fields that the students graduate in, will have a different working experience in the future and hence, this statement will be fallacious. Although, students can increase their humanity and can display probity at their work places, the charity may not allow the students to gain real world working experience.
Hence, the above points need to be considered inorder to examine the argument.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 460, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... be to graduate and not to help others. When the students will not have a good motiv...
^^^^
Line 3, column 223, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...tudents will find a way to circumvent it . Hence, proper supervision and monitorin...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 297.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23905723906 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73107362017 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478114478114 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.0548287568 57.8364921388 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.888888889 119.503703932 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 23.324526521 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196761306709 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961816752216 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442754578041 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111385541224 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726341028883 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 460, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... be to graduate and not to help others. When the students will not have a good motiv...
^^^^
Line 3, column 223, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...tudents will find a way to circumvent it . Hence, proper supervision and monitorin...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 297.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23905723906 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73107362017 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478114478114 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.0548287568 57.8364921388 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.888888889 119.503703932 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 23.324526521 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196761306709 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961816752216 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442754578041 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111385541224 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726341028883 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.