The following is an excerpt from a letter sent by the principal of Greenwood School to the parents of all incoming kindergarteners. "We have decided to institute a policy of all-day kindergarten, instead of half-day kindergarten, for all students at Greenwood School. All-day kindergarten will help all our students achieve at their highest levels. The classes will be 'tracked'; so that average students are together, but high-achieving and low-achieving students will be put together in classes. In this way, the high-achieving students will be able to help pull the low-achieving students up to their level, so that no student falls behind. The all-day kindergarten classes will cover the same material previously covered in the half-day kindergarten classes, but will go at a slower speed to accommodate learning differences. In addition, the students will receive extra instruction in music, art, and physical education. One of the greatest benefits of the plan, however, is that students will be in a structured environment for longer hours, reducing the numbers of hours that otherwise would be wasted at home or in day care."
From the letter sent by the principal to the parents of the potential kindergarten students, it is concluded that by doubling the time spent in the school shall help the students to reach greater feats. The premises that bolsters this conclusion, is that by making the students to stay in the school for longer periods, the school people could track the progress of the students and make changes, like the coalition of high and achievers together might lead to the high achievers in helping their low achieving peers in studies. Another statement that supports the assertion is that, teaching the students at a slower pace shall help in bridging the learning differences, and that by spending time school and not at home, they shall use their time by doing something useful. However, such a recommendation can be evaluated if the following two questions are answered.
Won't amalgamation of high and low achieve students seperate them from their friends, whom might belong average learning group? What is the guarantee that the high achievers shall help their low achieving classmates in studies, when we are not sure whether they shall mingle together or not? Students always feel comfortable when they are with their friends. For instance, if a low achieving student who has friends in the average learning group is separated from them, he would miss his friends and eventually fail in his exams. It likely that he might feel inferior when he is put among a group of erudite kids. Such an uneasy situation will not help him it gaining marks. If either of the situation is true, then its highly unlike that the student shall progress in his studies.
Isn't childhood about making good memories? Isn't it likely that children of such young age lose their opportunity to make friends in their neighbourhood if they are kept in their schools all day? The students should have some latitude and keeping them in schools all day might cut their chances in socializing. For example, it is possible that a kid who stays all day at the school to get tired and spend his evening at home taking rest. It is only during their childhood will learn more about making relationship with people. If the above is does not have warranted answer, then the conclusion us flawed.
Thus, if the above questions are answered by giving solid supporting evidence, probably a better evaluation could be made about the viability of the argument. It is only through some good research, we shall gain answers for the above unstated assumptions.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 429 350
No. of Characters: 2047 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.551 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.772 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.497 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.579 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.559 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.368 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.292 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.491 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.157 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Isn't
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Isn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, then, thus, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 28.8173652695 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 426.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93427230047 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55596185319 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504694835681 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.7479032395 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.631578947 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4210526316 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.84210526316 5.70786347227 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190186944271 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572028223705 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681222813814 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105133457042 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0770622614944 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.3550499002 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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