’The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.’
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Teamwork is the reason for success in every industry, government, and company. Nobody can achieve something without the help of others, and in order to gain someone's help, cooperation between each other is paramount. In the prompt, the author says, "The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition". I, partially agree with the statement, and not completely because, a healthy competition between people is an improtant driving force for achieving success. But other than that, i agree with most of what the author says.
Firstly, the author stresses that, instilling a sense of cooperation is important. By cooperating with colleagues or team members, we agree to work together with them to achieve a common goal. As stated in the beginning, teamwork is very essential for achieving great feats. For example, if a team of students are preparing for a task given by their teacher, and each of them would like to get their teachers attention, and try to work individually, instead as a team. Then no one shall cooperate with each other and they start working for their own goals. Definitely, the combined effort of number of people is always greater than individual effort, and so success always inclines towards the greatest efforts put. Whereas, a group of students who work together as a team shall definitely succeed. In order to work together, cooperation between each and every one of them is important.
In addition to this, only with cooperation can we be happy to work under a leader. For instance, Many people in the corporate offices hate to work under their boss, because they do not cooperate with their boss. Only when their is cooperation and coordination with everyone in the office, it is possible for them to work efficiently and happily. If the leader of the company, instills a thought that they are in a rat race, then everybody shall work for their own good, and not for a common goal.
In contrast to the above two points, i would like to agree that, some amount of competition is necessary to achieve the highest of our abilities. But the level of competition is confined to being a healthy one. In a healthy competition, people work for one common goal, but at the same time, try to drive each other to their utmost abilities. For example, it is common in many companies to conduct award ceremonies, and award the best performers. That drives people to work more effectively and make their appearance in the podium. Such healthy competition is works in positive way, and does not affect people negatively.
Albeit, the sense of cooperation being the most fundamental things one must learn during his young age, a healthy competition does not affect too.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...achieving success. But other than that, i agree with most of what the author says...
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Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lines towards the greatest efforts put. Whereas, a group of students who work together ...
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Message: Consider using 'each one'.
Suggestion: each one
...r to work together, cooperation between each and every one of them is important. In addition...
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Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...ot cooperate with their boss. Only when their is cooperation and coordination with ev...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... In contrast to the above two points, i would like to agree that, some amount o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, so, still, then, whereas, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2360.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 476.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95798319328 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7977830258 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466386554622 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 726.3 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 13.0 1.77640449438 732% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5212564245 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3333333333 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241530077196 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753244633 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114872143975 0.0758088955206 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142722528877 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118619969111 0.0667264976115 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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