The following is an excerpt from a letter sent by the principal of Greenwood School to the parents of all incoming kindergartners."We have decided to institute a policy of all-day kindergarten, instead of half-day kindergarten, for all students at Greenwo

There are many flaws in this decision to extend the school hours for kindergartens. Motive of the extension is to improve the students performance however stated plan has many flaws in itself. School authority is focusing on various aspects to enhancing students life but lacks in giving concrete solution .

First, Greenwood school has proposed the full day school for kindergarten instead of half day school but they have not provided the reason for protracting these extra hours. No one can claim that studying extra hours will improve the students performance instead of focusing on real challenges faced by particular student. All Kindergartens can not bear to stay in school for extra hours this might result into degradation in their own performance.

School is proposing this plan to take their students to highest level but they have not mentioned and elaborated the defination for highest level of their students. so it is very difficult to conclude that extending extra hours will lead to achieve the highest level in students life. School is also proposing to bring all students together so that high-achieving students will help low-achieving studets. But students main task is not to help and train other students in the school. Here teachers should take care of these low-achieving students. If school is asking to its scholar students to teach other students then it will degrade their own performance.

School is also proposing to repeat the previously covered topic in extended school time. This will lead to wastage of time because many institutes ask their students to repeat the topic at home in form of home-work but by asking the students to repeat the topic in school time, Greenwood school is wasting the precious school time and not paying proper attention towards teaching new skills and topics.

By considering all these flaws one can state that Greenwood school's new plan in not full proof to enhance the student life by enforcing this flawed policy.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...tive of the extension is to improve the students performance however stated plan has man...
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Line 1, column 306, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...fe but lacks in giving concrete solution . First, Greenwood school has proposed...
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Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...t studying extra hours will improve the students performance instead of focusing on real...
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Line 5, column 54, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the highest'.
Suggestion: to the highest
...posing this plan to take their students to highest level but they have not mentioned and e...
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Line 5, column 166, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...on for highest level of their students. so it is very difficult to conclude that e...
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Line 5, column 549, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e care of these low-achieving students. If school is asking to its scholar student...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1667.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 324.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1450617284 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65441287149 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.765579909 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.133333333 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.6 5.70786347227 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231148839416 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843514622837 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676102564061 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135574583163 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762125459223 0.0628817314937 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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