It might seem logical, at first glance, to agree with the argument in the newsletter that to abridge absenteeism in schools and workplaces, daily use of nutritional supplement should be used as it will help to prevent cold. However, in order to fully evaluate this argument, we need to have a significant amount of additional evidence. The argument could end being much weaker than it seem, or it might actually be quite valid. In order to make that determination, we need to know more then analyze what we learn.
The first piece of evidence that we would need in order to evaluate the argument is information about the climatic condition,number of population present in East Meria and also types of people who took part in that analysis on the basis of which study report was concluded. The newsletter provides no information about the validity that all these conditions are same for East Meria as it is in West Meria. If these conditions are not same then it is not plausible to compare two different things. It is possible that the people of East Meria are more robust because of their rigid climatic conditions so they do not catch cold easily. Fish nutrients are helpful also but they are already immune to such fragile conditions. This makes the conclusion of the argument to be unfeasible.
Another piece of information that might help us to warrant the argument is information about different type of reason that to could reach in causing cold to people. Even if the the study reports are authentic and credible, it is not viable to think that only because of fish consumption the people of East Meria are not catching cold. There could be other precautions that they might have been taking to be immune towards cold.
Also, the author of newsletter has failed to take into account the details because of which less number of people visit doctor. He is becoming injudicious to think that number of people who are visiting doctor is equal to number of people who are actually sick and catching cold. It is possible that since people of East Meria catch cold so often that they know what prescription they need and hence, to save money and time they do not visit doctor every time. If this condition turns out to be true than the argument will become unwarranted and illogical.
In order to fully evaluate this memo, we would also need to learn more about the multifaceted reasons behind absenteeism. It is not practical to think that cold is the only reason behind people taking leaves from their works. It could be any other reason like, personal work or fecklessness or accident. For these reasons increasing fish consumption will not be a judicious solution.
Also, even if cold is the major reason behind taking leave, there is no such information or research that people of West Meria will respond to fish in the same predicted manner. There could be a situation when it could go all wrong and on the contrary people could become more infectious because of fish.
Therefore, author should not come into such hasty conclusion without thinking about multifarious possibilities. He should go into details instead of simply assuming things.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 542 350
No. of Characters: 2562 1500
No. of Different Words: 229 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.825 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.727 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.497 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.68 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.212 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.68 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.287 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.287 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 487, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...hat determination, we need to know more then analyze what we learn. The first piece...
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Line 2, column 125, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , number
...information about the climatic condition,number of population present in East Meria and...
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Line 2, column 406, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... for East Meria as it is in West Meria. If these conditions are not same then it i...
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Line 3, column 173, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...each in causing cold to people. Even if the the study reports are authentic and credibl...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 173, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...each in causing cold to people. Even if the the study reports are authentic and credibl...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 261, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o number of people who are actually sick and catching cold. It is possible that s...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.9520958084 193% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 28.8173652695 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2615.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 541.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83364140481 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60554255897 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430683918669 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 821.7 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1653266709 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.6 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.64 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0825508131395 0.218282227539 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.024538558642 0.0743258471296 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0360306651539 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0414918206509 0.128457276422 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282097965453 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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