The mayor of Hopewell suggested to build a golf course and resort hotel in order to improve the town’s economy and claimed it to be the best way. He argued that it would increase tourism, attract new businesses and, as a result, generate additional tax revenues - just like it happened in the nearby town of Ocean View. However, his or her argument is based on a series of assumptions that make it unconvincing unless being proved.
The mayor points out that Ocean View is a nearby town and bases his argument on the assumption that the produced result of building new facilities will be the same in his town. However, it is entirely possible that building a golf course and resort hotel will not be as profitable in Hopewell. Tourists will probably prefer to an already familiar place which is in Ocean View. What is more, as economics teaches us - if there is a growing supply, the prices become less. Therefore, even if Hopewell turns out to be somewhat popular with the public it will not necessarily produce as much profit as expected. A lot of money can be lost in the advertisement and other marketing campaigns in order to win new customers and turn them into loyal clients. Hence, the town economists should analyze the possible revenues, the number of potential customers and other variables that may influence the success of the project.
Even if the above-mentioned assumption is valid, we are not provided with the locations of the golf course and resort hotel in the towns. It lets the author assume that the locations will be equally favorable for opening new businesses. For that matter, perhaps the facilities in Ocean View were built in the city center or in another highly appealing place - the places that were originally highly visited and popular among locals and tourists. It can equally be the case that Hopewell is short of available land and the facilities will be built on the outskirts of the town, impeding the growth of the business there and making it difficult to reach for tourists. As a result, such investments might never become profitable.
What is more, the author’s argument relies on the two assumptions regarding the tax rates: (1) that the Ocean View’s tax rate has not changed in 2 years; (2) that they are the same in both towns. Those assumptions are obviously not necessarily true. Perhaps, the tax rate in Ocean View was increased 2 years ago and, therefore, it is accountable for the growth of tax revenues and not the new facilities. Moreover, Ocean View’s taxes can possibly be twice more than the ones of Hopewell. Accordingly, the improvement of Hopewell’s budget cannot be expected unless we are provided with more details regarding towns’ tax rates and their statistics.
In sum, the proposal to build a golf course and resort hotel may sound persuasive and appealing at first, but after a scrutiny of the logic behind it becomes less convincing. In order to evaluate the soundness and economic sensibility of this idea more information is required about the above-named points.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 517 350
No. of Characters: 2455 1500
No. of Different Words: 242 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.768 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.749 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.608 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.521 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.282 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.486 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 446, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
...ties. Moreover, Ocean View's taxes can possibly be twice more than the ones of Hopewell...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, well, as a result, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 11.1786427146 197% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2551.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 517.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93423597679 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78349358513 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 204.123752495 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487427466151 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 803.7 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4125487809 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.954545455 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31818181818 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298806512695 0.218282227539 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818941141164 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713925775744 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163316272084 0.128457276422 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668625287585 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 98.500998004 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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