The following was written as a part of an application for a small-business loan by a group of developers in the city of Monroe.
"Jazz music is extremely popular in the city of Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight. Also, a number of well-known jazz musicians own homes in Monroe. Nevertheless, the nearest jazz club is over an hour away. Given the popularity of jazz in Monroe and a recent nationwide study indicating that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment, a jazz music club in Monroe would be tremendously profitable."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author argues that the absence of Jazz club in Monroe despite the popularity of Jazz music, provides a brilliant chance to set up a profitable business. While the author could be wise in suggesting that, there are a lot of assumptions and logical leaps in the argument which seriously undermine the predicted profitability of the business.
The primary argument is that Jazz music is very popular among Monroe residents. The author assumes that the number of people attending the annual fest can be taken as a measure of the popularity. Being an annual fest, cited event is most likely to attract fans from nearby cities, even far ones depending upon the event. For the cited event and attendance to be of any value in indicating the popularity of the Jazz music in Monroe, it is to be known how many of the participants were Monroe residents.
Even though the annual fest attendance casts doubt on the conclusion drawn, author tries to bolster it by providing another fact, namely the highest rated status enjoyed by the radio program 'Jazz nightly'. Sounding convincing at the first look, it nevertheless does not provide evidence that the people are after Jazz music; other than the name, nothing is stated about the program and it could well be interviews with Jazz musicians ( argument states that there are Jazz musicians residing in Monroe) or about something tangentially related to Jazz music. If that be the case reading the interest of the citizens in the program for Jazz music itself will be highly misleading.
Even if it is the case that Jazz music is really popular in Monroe, it does not provide that the citizens would frequent a Jazz club, had the city got one. Nothing about the economic status of the residents are stated which will play a crucial role in the proposed club earning revenue. What if the majority, save the Musicians mentioned in the argument, finds it difficult to patron a Jazz club. It could well be a reason for the long absence of a Jazz club in Monroe.
Even if the citizens are wealthy enough that a Jazz club seems affordable, there is nothing to be based to predict their spending on the same. The author quotes a study conducted nationwide, which concluded that an average fan spends 1000 dollars per year. Are the spending habits of of Jazz fans alike across the nation? Even if the Jazz fans in Monroe are in agreement with the spending habits, profitability cannot be evaluated unless the number of expected patrons (depend on population and percentage of Jazz fans in the city), costs of setting the facility and the expense of upkeep are known.
While the argument proposes an interesting business idea, much more research is to done to eliminate the various other variables which could make the above assumptions unwarranted, and thus the plan, not worthy enough to commit economic resources into.
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'if', 'look', 'nevertheless', 'really', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'while']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.268939393939 0.25644967241 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.164772727273 0.15541462614 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0700757575758 0.0836205057962 84% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0511363636364 0.0520304965353 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0189393939394 0.0272364105082 70% => OK
Prepositions: 0.140151515152 0.125424944231 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0549242424242 0.0416121511921 132% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.53453372304 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0227272727273 0.026700313972 85% => OK
Particles: 0.00189393939394 0.001811407834 105% => OK
Determiners: 0.13446969697 0.113004496875 119% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0170454545455 0.0255425247493 67% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0132575757576 0.0127820249294 104% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2861.0 2731.13054187 105% => OK
No of words: 488.0 446.07635468 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.86270491803 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.57801047555 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.34631147541 0.378187486979 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.241803278689 0.287650121315 84% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.159836065574 0.208842608468 77% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.106557377049 0.135150697306 79% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53453372304 2.79052419416 91% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 207.018472906 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485655737705 0.469332199767 103% => OK
Word variations: 56.0942821251 52.1807786196 107% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 27.1111111111 23.2022227129 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.6171467355 57.7814097925 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.944444444 141.986410481 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1111111111 23.2022227129 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.724660767414 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 51.29143898 51.9672348444 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.97580645161 1.8405768891 107% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.467657985461 0.441005458295 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.145681790943 0.135418324435 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0981901133764 0.0829849096947 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.677983359792 0.58762219726 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.158730380873 0.147661913831 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.24098873466 0.193483328276 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103493317316 0.0970749176394 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.514957829581 0.42659136922 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.12054164901 0.0774707102158 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.339114471971 0.312017818177 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0989821982204 0.0698173142475 142% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.33743842365 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 10.0 14.657635468 68% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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