"In general, people are not as concerned as they were a decade ago about regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheeses. Walk into Heart's Delight, a store that started selling organic fruits and vegetables and whole-grain flours in the 1960's, and you will also find a wide selection of cheeses made with high butterfat content. Next door, the owners of the Good Earth Cafe, an old vegetarian restaurant, are still making a modest living, but the owners of the new House of Beef across the street are millionaires."
The author has concluded that people are not concern much in their calorie intake of red meat and fatty cheeses unlike people of decade ago. To support his conclusion, author has exhibited the example of heart's Delight, Good Earth Cafe and the new House of Beef that they have change their business as per the food habit of consumers. Although the argument has some merits, because of weak assumption, lack of evidence and vague language make the argument unsubstantiated. Hence, the argument is deeply flawed.
Firstly, the author assumed that as Heart's Delight is not selling cheeses products, which was selling organic fruits and vegetables and whole-grain flours in the 1960's that means consumer are not concern about their intake of fatty cheeses. But, there is no clear evidence that consumer is taking cheeses above the required level. Moreover, there is no data on customer in both time intervals. Without this information, it is hard to believe that author assumption is correct.
Secondly, the author stated that the owners of the new House of Beef are millionaires whereas the owners of the Good Earth Cafe, an old vegetarian restaurant, is not earning enough and living a modest life style. According to author, this is a clear indication of consumer eating pattern shift to red meat from vegetable products. However, one business is flourishing compare to other business depends on various factors such as, marketing strategy, advertisement and working staff's capability. As author has not mentioned any information that the owners of House of Beef is getting richer only due to consumer food habits, the reasoning remained vague and unpersuasive.
Lastly, author has not mentioned data on intake value of consumers and concluded that current consumers are taking more calorie that people of 1960. It is quite possible that if a person change his food habit form vegetarian to non-vegetarian, he still can control food intake. Therefore, argument is based on false assumption.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 322 350
No. of Characters: 1633 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.236 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.071 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.591 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.756 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.531 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, whereas, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.9520958084 8% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1683.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 322.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22670807453 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70816891111 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549689440994 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9308399924 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.2 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4666666667 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.70786347227 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194576688355 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058087131345 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112516825926 0.0701772020484 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117821215612 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0905890941591 0.0628817314937 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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