The prompt suggests that various large mammal species on the Kaliko Island disappeared because of humans’ hunting. It is logical to think that the extinction of species can be based on hunting of humans, however, the author does not provide any solid evidence in order to make the claim persuasive.
The speaker is assuming that since one of the sources of food of humans were through fishing, thus it is feasible that the humans also hunted mammals for food. In concluding this, the author is making the correlation based on deficient proof. It is possible that the Kaliko islanders did not have enough tools to hunt large animals. Or perhaps, the islanders did not knew that the mammals can be the source for the food. It is also likely that the people of the island lived on different regions of the island while the large mammals occupied other regions of the island. Hence, the islanders never came across the large mammals. To make the evidence convincing, the author should first consider other factors that may have hindered the people of the island to use large mammals as a source for the food.
Furthermore, along with the correlation of finishing to hunting, the author also suggest that since the possible tool of hunting Stone Knife was found in the region, the tool must have been used for hunting. Yet again, the author is assuming this is possible, but there are various other factors that could possibly explain the existence of the tool on the region of the island. Stone Knife could have been used for other things such as for logging, finishing etc. It is most likely that the knife is found in the kitchen, it must be used for chopping vegetables and other food. Yet, it can be wrong if the knife instead is used for the gardening. It just happened to be placed in the kitchen.Hence, the author should not assume that since something was discovered at certain place, it must be used for it.
It is believed that the hunting is the only cause for the extinction. There could be many other factors that can cause the extinction of animals such as climate change, forest fires, flooding and other natural calamities that could have possibly caused the extinction of the large mammals. To make the argument convincing, the author should identify the other factors that could probably be the causes for the large mammals extinction in the Kaliko Island.
In order to make the argument more concrete, the author first needs to provide sufficient answers to the queries that is being raised in the above paragraphs.
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- People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers. 50
- People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making. 50
- Humans arrived in the Kaliko Islands about 7,000 years ago, and within 3,000 years most of the large mammal species that had lived in the forests of the Kaliko Islands were extinct. Previous archaeological findings have suggested that early humans general 49
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 368, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'know'
...mals. Or perhaps, the islanders did not knew that the mammals can be the source for ...
Line 3, column 458, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
...od. It is also likely that the people of the island lived on different regions of...
Line 5, column 302, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY
Message: Use simply 'could'.
...ut there are various other factors that could possibly explain the existence of the tool on th...
Line 5, column 694, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
...st happened to be placed in the kitchen.Hence, the author should not assume that sinc...
Line 7, column 417, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'mammals'' or 'mammal's'?
Suggestion: mammals'; mammal's
...ld probably be the causes for the large mammals extinction in the Kaliko Island. In...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, thus, while, as for, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 438.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82191780822 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39432305383 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.408675799087 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 651.6 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8833763925 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.157894737 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0526315789 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63157894737 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189091941469 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07529423504 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781161750041 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116859441464 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0903693946098 0.0628817314937 144% => OK
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2048 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.665 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.24 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.389 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.757 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.58 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5