An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The rising issues to deficiency of vitamin A has has led to engineering of new millet crop which could prove helpful to get rid of this up roaring menace. This should be supported by the government by doing a full background check regarding the crop.
The background check should be done on basis of what side effects does the crop have and whether they are deleterious enough to be attended to? Further understand the properties of the crop and understand the myriad of components that have been used to create the crop. The processes associated with it and how the chemical and physical properties of this crop differs from the local millet. Further checks should be done to understand the reason for the high cost price of the crop and whether it is warranted to the cost.
There could be speculations about the efficiency of the crop since it is foreign crop and doubts whether it could grow abundantly in the local area and also the amount of resources needed to cultivate the crop such as how much water and fertilizer does the crop require for it to grow prolifically in the region, also whether the growing season is same as the local crops.
If the crops have different growing seasons than the local, it would improve the crop rotation and enrich the soil with beneficial nutrients and help the farmers earn more revenue from the surplus produce. It is of dire need that the experiments which reveal that these crops cure deficiency of vitamin A be made public and given to local labs to stronghold the belief and check the effectivity.
Furthermore, the subsidies should be large enough to counter the elevated prices of the crops and provide the farmers respite from the prevailing misery. Government should take care of the farmers and be responsible for the crops success and bolster with all the raw materials and be prepared to be at the disposal of the farmer as and when required.
The answers to these questions will estabish a clear understanding of how efficiently the crop will help curb the disease and what kind of performance can be expected. It will create a sense of accountability between the farmers and the government and help boost the economy by generating excess revenue and ameliorate the health of the farmers, consequentially the mortality rate. This whole trade process will hopefully make the farmers salubrious and improve their well being.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 408 350
No. of Characters: 1949 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.494 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.777 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.627 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.305 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.639 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: has
...ising issues to deficiency of vitamin A has has led to engineering of new millet crop w...
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Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...e deleterious enough to be attended to? Further understand the properties of the crop a...
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Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...his crop differs from the local millet. Further checks should be done to understand the...
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Line 6, column 304, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... these crops cure deficiency of vitamin A be made public and given to local labs to ...
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Line 8, column 111, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'farmers'' or 'farmer's'?
Suggestion: farmers'; farmer's
...ted prices of the crops and provide the farmers respite from the prevailing misery. Gov...
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Line 8, column 225, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'crops'' or 'crop's'?
Suggestion: crops'; crop's
... the farmers and be responsible for the crops success and bolster with all the raw ma...
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Line 10, column 330, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...excess revenue and ameliorate the health of the farmers, consequentially the mort...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, regarding, so, well, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 11.1786427146 197% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 408.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86519607843 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65589370759 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490196078431 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.1686880403 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.785714286 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1428571429 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164671222956 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690567998355 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507852603347 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0965283724319 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508642107997 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.3799401198 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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