An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The prompt suggest that due to the vitamin A deficiency in people of Tagus, government should provide subsidy to farmers for growing a new variety of millets as it is the staple food in the region. But before reaching to any conclusion on this argument, there are four questions as below, that need to be answered.
Firstly, comparative data needs to be presented about the taste of two millet varieties. The argument states that millet is the staple food in Tagus, but it maybe due to several reasons including the taste of the crop. If the new breed of millet does not taste the same or even worse, it tastes bad then it will lead to people buying the old breed over the new one following a demand and supply problem. This is turn may cause the prices of old millets to be ballooned and people will be forced to consume a breed of this crop which they do not even like on daily basis.
Secondly, a study need to be conducted which analyze the growth of new variety of millet with respect to the environmental conditions and soil fertility, to ensure that new variety of millet grows at the same or better rate as older variety. If government provides subsidy to farmers for growing this novel variety of crop and they later find out that it takes double the time to grow in the weather conditions that are persistent throughout the year in the country, then it will not only lead to wastage of funds but also result in severe shortage of food in the region. Not just this, but a lesser yield in a staple crop may also lead to poverty in a farming dependent areas causing affecting economy of the country. Hence, weather this new crop yield is same as existing variety, needs to be tested to make sure that it is giving the same result as the older variety.
Furthermore, as the other benefits of millets in providing several nutrients can not be neglected. Therefore, it is highly questionable weather other health benefits of new variety of millet is identical with the existing crop. It is crucial to test the effects of new variety on a person's health overall and not just with respect to vitamin A. Millets are rich in carbohydrates and fiber and producing a new variety which is rich in vitamin A but deficient in other nutrients will lead to more harm than good. Specially if it is a staple food in Tagus, we can safely assume that majority of population will consume it on everyday basis. Prior to reaching towards a conclusion and encouraging people for having the new variety on diurnal bases, it is mandatory to evaluate a complete effect of this new crop on human body.
Lastly, it is important to answer weather the new breed of millet are cooked in the same way as old variety. If the new breed takes long to be cooked then it can also be major turnoff for people. Due to this people who may prefer to try it once may not buy it again. If a comparative data is presented displaying the cooking time and method of old and new millet variety then only it is a great idea to for government to invest.
Therefore, research oriented comparative data needs to be provided before reaching to a conclusion about weather this new breed of millets can replace the existing breed used by people on day to day basis.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 585 350
No. of Characters: 2593 1500
No. of Different Words: 232 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.918 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.432 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.401 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.999 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.9 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.573 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vitamin A deficiency in people of Tagus, government should provide subsidy to far...
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...ns as below, that need to be answered. Firstly, comparative data needs to be pr...
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... they do not even like on daily basis. Secondly, a study need to be conducted w...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'area'?
Suggestion: area
... lead to poverty in a farming dependent areas causing affecting economy of the countr...
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... the same result as the older variety. Furthermore, as the other benefits of mi...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...to test the effects of new variety on a persons health overall and not just with respec...
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Message: Did you mean 'a bit'?
Suggestion: A bit
... a new variety which is rich in vitamin A but deficient in other nutrients will lead ...
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...effect of this new crop on human body. Lastly, it is important to answer weathe...
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Suggestion: these
...lso be major turnoff for people. Due to this people who may prefer to try it once ma...
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...eat idea to for government to invest. Therefore, research oriented comparative...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, with respect to, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 55.5748502994 164% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2640.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 585.0 441.139720559 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51282051282 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46210226212 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.393162393162 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 848.7 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1895799167 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.714285714 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8571428571 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337761188288 0.218282227539 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115352616876 0.0743258471296 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583069516469 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205115759519 0.128457276422 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044503495058 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 12.5979740519 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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