An international development organization in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A While seeds for this new type of millet cost more farmers will be paid

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An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The recommendation in which the Tagus government should do everything it can to promote the new type of millet to combat a vitamin A deficiency among the people of Tagus is a viable strategy, but one that may not reap its intended result of ameliorating the vitamin A deficiency in Tagus.

Before the government of Tagus "does everything it can" to promote this new type of millet, it would be pivotal to seek out the true and undeclared intentions of the international development organization. The action of introducing a new variety of millet to the food chain may drastically alter the source and economic patterns of the millet market. Despite the "well-intendedness" of the organization, the government or relevant anti-trust bodies in Tagus should ensure that the welfare of its economic markets and farmers will remain intact. In doing so, the government may avoid a situation reminiscent of Big Pharma and other developing countries in the real world. Reproductive capabilities of the seeds should be questioned, as is the stake the organization has in the industry and the possibility of creating a monopoly in the market for millets.

Likewise, the outcome of this move by the government pivots on the responsiveness of the people towards the promotion of the new type of millet. Assuming the new millet is marketed as the new medicinal supplement targeted towards the widespread vitamin A deficiency, the government would do good to scout out the general public's attitude towards genetically-modified foods, especially if such a concept was not previously known to the people of Tagus. The farmer's attitudes towards obtaining seed from foreign international bodies may also be sceptical, if not rejecting of such a major seed provider as a new player in the market.

Lastly, a scope into the root cause of the vitamin A deficiency would be meaningful, especially if this reason is one that undermines the success of consuming millet high in vitamin A as a dietary supplement. It may be possible that poverty and the lack of variety and hence vitamin A in one's diet could be one of these causes. In such cases, subsidies for the new millet seeds bringing down the cost of farming new millet may not be sufficient in ensuring the new millet reaching the most impoverished echelons of Tagus society, given the elevated price of new millet seeds.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 322, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'publics'' or 'public's'?
Suggestion: publics'; public's
... would do good to scout out the general publics attitude towards genetically-modified f...
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Line 7, column 289, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... lack of variety and hence vitamin A in ones diet could be one of these causes. In s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, lastly, likewise, may, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1992.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 392.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08163265306 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29462285779 2.78398813304 118% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477040816327 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.2413560587 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.0 119.503703932 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.6666666667 23.324526521 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41666666667 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.446772603416 0.218282227539 205% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162125800744 0.0743258471296 218% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889561196792 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.281523487558 0.128457276422 219% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591074717795 0.0628817314937 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 14.3799401198 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 12.3882235529 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.9071856287 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 392 350
No. of Characters: 1934 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.45 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.934 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.058 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.15 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.405 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.606 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5