An international development organization in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A While seeds for this new type of millet cost more farmers will be paid | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.

Vitamin A is an uncompromisable necessity for human body. The prompt concludes, to combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can promote this new type of millet is based on the evidence that farmers of tagus can grow these seeds with the help of subsidies and will be easy adopted because millet is already a staple food. This argument is flawed and raises further questions which need to be answered before this argument can be evaluated. This essay describes three of these questions in detail.

At first, How can the new breed of millet be adopted readily? We have real world examples which show that a slight modification in the original product can led to a disastorous outcome. For instance, We have a bread "A" and due to deficiency of iodine we added a slight amount of iodine in it. That slight addition of iodine can cause significant damage to the product because it will not taste the same and it will not be the same in a visual sense. So a good evidence (a survey) is required. If author fails to answer the question then this will make the argument weaker.

Secondly, How do we know that farmer will be able to produce the new millet even with government subsidies? There is no evidence (or study) that gives us a numerical proof that the farmers will be able to cope up with the high production prices. Economic condition varies from individual to individual , it can not be assumed that if one farmer can then other farmers will also be able to produce it. So an evidence (perhaps an economic study) is required to answer this question. If author can not answer this question then this makes the argument weak.

At last, How do we know that intake of new millet breed will provide sufficient vitamin A for the population? It can be the case that the population of tagus takes only a small proportion of millet in their meals. Also, it is possible that the population required more vitamin A than what it can get from new millet. A proper evidence is required to give brief insight about the effectiveness of the food based vitamin A consumption. If author fails to provide the answer for this question then it makes the argument weak.

In conclusion, there are many questions that need to be answered before the argument can be evaluated effectively without bias or prejudices. So more evidence is required to answer these questions. If these question remain unanswered, the author's argument becomes weak and full of flaws.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 16.3942115768 183% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2059.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 434.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74423963134 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64041177522 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437788018433 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.0 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.7288992442 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5217391304 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8695652174 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13043478261 5.70786347227 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283076601033 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0892726595867 0.0743258471296 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733257044449 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17550732874 0.128457276422 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0886264380716 0.0628817314937 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments