An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In response to the vitamin A deficiency among the people in impoverished nation of tagus, author suggests that a new breed of millet has been engineered which has high vitamin A . Also he says that because it can be expensive overall , farmers get subsidies for farming it. The solution suggested by the author seems cogent to some point ,but there are certain question which need to be answered by the author before any conclusion.
Firstly, are there no other solution that the new expensive millet? The author says that the new costly millet has high vitamin A , but he does not include any other possible solution for that .there an be other sources of vitamin A which can be cheaper .Fruits are good source of vitamin A , the author doesnot point any . Maybe they could combat the deficiency with foods already grown in that area , or a new one that is less cheaper to grow can be introduced. before author recommends it there need to vigorous research on this .
Secondly , will the new breed proliferate ? The author does says that millet is staple food in tagus , but that is for the previous breed. The author doesnot mention any new changes required than the new breed of seed. author doesnot provide any prior experiment of growing the new breed. If every people enticed by vitamin A content of new breed goes for its farming and the millet doesnot grow well , then whole country can suffer another consequence. So , they should first plant the new breed in small area and observe its growth and fructition.
Thirdly , will the subsidy be enough for all the harvest ? According to author farmer will be given subsidies but will that be enough ? Without knowing the required condition for the new breed , how does the government decide the amount of subsidy ?will the government give subsidy only for seeds or for entire process of plant growing. The farmer might need trainings to grow this new breed. The new breed might entice anothet type of rodent. farmer might not know how to deal with those.
Thus , a subsidy will not be enough, trainings and more detail about the product should be given to the farmers.
In conslusion , the reasons provided by the author for combating vitamin A deficiency are baseless and the above mentioned three question should be answered by the author .
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 394 350
No. of Characters: 1840 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.455 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.67 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.267 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.176 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.065 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.368 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.588 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 394.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81725888325 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38951034455 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46192893401 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.8558298891 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.380952381 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7619047619 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 36.0 5.25449101796 685% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424012265086 0.218282227539 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137857534953 0.0743258471296 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100611321118 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211340307173 0.128457276422 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0819833240516 0.0628817314937 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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