In some organizations, promotions are based on seniority, while in other organizations, promotions are based on performance. Discuss the advantages of each position. Then indicate which position you think is best and wh
promotion is a way of acknowledging people's work. In my opinion promotions should be based on performance. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First of all , performance based promotions inspire the employee to give their best at work . It becomes the motivational factor to learn and grow everyday. For example in a company, two employees are hired for the same job within a six months period and the employee hired later is working very hard and proving himself everyday. he even prepares for his work at home and gives better output than the employee hired earlier . then, at the time of promotion the employee hired earlier gets promoted just because he had worked for a longer period . if such things happen, then the non promoted employee is likely to get disappointed with the promotion policy . he might start searching for another company . this will be a great loss for the company .
Additionally, promotion based on seniority might encourage people to be negligent in their work.if an employee is aware that no matter how he performs , he will get promoted only after his seniors , he might not be interested in working enthusiastically. there will be no competition for work . employees will tend to skip their work or do only what the job requires rather than giving extra output to their work . For example, seniority based promotion is common in government offices in my country and there we can see every work getting delayed . even those employees who were very bright and efficient seemed unmotivated and working inactively .
In conclusion , promotion is the reward for the work of the employee and if rewarded accordingly the employee gets motivated Otherwise the company might face negative consequences . So , I think promotion should be based on performance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, if, so, then, thus, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1551.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1357615894 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8557078013 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546357615894 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.8519869337 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1666666667 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7777777778 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 5.5376344086 542% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155426250652 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678274927901 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732002977553 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12133770053 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0136891632146 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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