Last October the city of Belleville installed high intensity lighting in its central business district and vandalism there declined within a month The city of Amburg has recently begun police patrols on bicycles in its business district but the rate of va

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Last October the city of Belleville installed high-intensity lighting in its central business district, and vandalism there declined within a month. The city of Amburg has recently begun police patrols on bicycles in its business district, but the rate of vandalism there remains constant. We should install high-intensity lighting throughout Amburg, then, because doing so is a more effective way to combat crime. By reducing crime in this way, we can revitalize the declining neighborhoods in our city.

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

In the excerpt, the author recommends that in order to decrease the crimes and revitalize the neighborhoods in the Amburg city, it is a sound option to install the high-intensity lighting throughout the city, since it has an undeniable influence in the Bellevile city. This recommendation rests on the series of unsubstantiated assumptions and is, therefore, unpersuasive as it stands.

First of all, the article does not mention the type of crime in the Bellevile city; maybe it was a type of the crime such as the usage of the drug, which requires a dim place. As a result, by installing the light, they demolish this situation for the addicts. Besides, the writer assumes that the crime of Bellevile city is identical to the crime of Amburg city. However, there is no any lucid evidence about this issue. For instance, maybe the huge portion of crime activity in the Amburg city is related to the internet crimes such as the fake bank account for internet purchase. In this condition, the installation of the high-lighting system is an abortive action. Without providing the accurate data about the crimes and the efficiency of lighting system on them, this assumption is factitious.

Another threshold presumption upon which the recommendation relies is that the police patrols by bicycle do not address the combat the vandalism in this city. Actually, it is a facial conclusion; inasmuch as the author does not provide any information about this petrol and its duration. Maybe, the police forces were not prepared in the sufficient quantity to overcome whole crimes. In addition, as it mentioned in the text, this service has started just recently; maybe it does not have the adequate span of time to execute its whole schemes to tackle the vandalism.

Finally, the passage expects that by the decrement of crime and vandalism, the deprived neighborhoods of the city will revitalize. It is merely a vague expectation about the future without the cogent and concrete evidence to adherence its feasibility. The neighborhood can be decreased for the sake of the insufficient facilities, or the lake of the easy-access transportation system. Without counting for these and other possible causes, the author cannot assume that there will be an increment in the neighborhoods. Therefore, the assumption and expectation should shape based on the logic clue of this decrease and the valid method to flourish it.

In conclusion, to persuade me that the installing high-lighting system will be effective in the Ambrug city, the writer must supply clear evidence that the crime types of two cities are similar. He must also provide a clue that police patrols cannot address this problem solo and the decline of neighborhood in this city is related to crime and vandalism. As it stands, however, the argument is flawed for the reason indicated.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 382, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...crime of Amburg city. However, there is no any lucid evidence about this issue. Fo...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'besides', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'as a result', 'first of all']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.257692307692 0.25644967241 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.128846153846 0.15541462614 83% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0634615384615 0.0836205057962 76% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0403846153846 0.0520304965353 78% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0326923076923 0.0272364105082 120% => OK
Prepositions: 0.134615384615 0.125424944231 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0269230769231 0.0416121511921 65% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.93899693027 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0211538461538 0.026700313972 79% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.169230769231 0.113004496875 150% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0173076923077 0.0255425247493 68% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00576923076923 0.0127820249294 45% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2858.0 2731.13054187 105% => OK
No of words: 467.0 446.07635468 105% => OK
Chars per words: 6.1199143469 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.372591006424 0.378187486979 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.282655246253 0.287650121315 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.209850107066 0.208842608468 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.139186295503 0.135150697306 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93899693027 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 207.018472906 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475374732334 0.469332199767 101% => OK
Word variations: 53.8144736331 52.1807786196 103% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.039408867 105% => OK
Sentence length: 22.2380952381 23.2022227129 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8980433732 57.7814097925 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.095238095 141.986410481 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2380952381 23.2022227129 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.714285714286 0.724660767414 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 50.5036198634 51.9672348444 97% => OK
Elegance: 2.07619047619 1.8405768891 113% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448258241177 0.441005458295 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.103385531272 0.135418324435 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.057599956611 0.0829849096947 69% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.630723477329 0.58762219726 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.156269746055 0.147661913831 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.216862037016 0.193483328276 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875351984054 0.0970749176394 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.582794887912 0.42659136922 137% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0468473397395 0.0774707102158 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.355162557777 0.312017818177 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307334951878 0.0698173142475 44% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.87684729064 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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