Last year PrepUp had record enrollment in their test prep courses, but yearly profits fell by nearly 30
percent. To the contrary, TopPreparation had comparable enrollment to the year be fore, with profits rising
by approximately 20 percent. This discrepancy most likely results from the fact that PrepUp teaches only
live, in-person classes, which require expensive rental spaces and teaching equipment. Although
TopPreparation’s total enrollment remained unchanged, its online enrollment increased by 50 percent, and
online classes have a much lower overhead. In order to address these issues of profitability in the coming
year, PrepUp will begin offering online test prep courses.
The argument claims that PrepUp should switch into providing online preparation courses for increasing the profits. While it might be true that making this change could potentially increase the profitability, the argument is not entirely logically convincing since it misses some crucial counterfactors. Taking inspiration from one and making changes to the other is really not going to help unless we establish similarity among the two organizations. Further, it is not clear if the profit increase in TopPreparation should be completely attributed to online education system. Also, other factors governing the profits are not mentioned and should be quantified and carefully weighed before making any final claim.
The largest leap in the argument is that the two organizations are assumed to be inherently same. Maybe they are entirely different, and possibly the onlie model of education does not work at all for PrepUp. For instance, if PrepUp is an institution which instructs only primary school children aged between 6-10, while TopPreparation guides only college students then the entire argument fails. Clearly, a system of online education will not fly with children since they would not have necessary devices like computers, laptops etc. So it is prudent to ask if the two organizations can be really considered similar in the first place.
Even if the organizations are the same it is necessary to question if the increased profit of TopPreparation can be entirely attributed to the online system of education. It might be the case that this organization increased the fees for offline classes and only the in-person classes contributed to the profit. The online system may be just the supplement along with an offline system and that might be a possible way TopPreparation increased its enrolment in online classes and increased the profits. So concluding that only online system caused the profit increase is clearly flawed. Additionally, the percentages do not provide a complete picture of the actual increase, since the actual amount amounting to 50% profit increase for TopPreparation might be inconsequential for PrepUp.
Finally, it is wise to consider the other side of profit i.e. expenses. It is not clear from the argument if there was any decrease in expenses like teachers' monthly payment, time of classes and so on. If the salary of teachers were to be reduced and assuming all other factors to be more or less constant it will definitely increase the profitability of the institute. So one should consider how have the expenses changed for the two organizations over and whether really they cause a jump in the profits.
The argument presents an interesting claim about making a change by adopting online education classes. However, the questions of similarity, attribution and affect of other factors remain unwarranted. These steps might not be enough to establish the validity of the hypothesis beyond a doubt, but they would help in determining whether the pursuit of the hypothesis is a good use of time, funds, and attention.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: While it might be true that making this change could potentially increase the profitability, the argument is not entirely logically convincing since it misses some crucial counterfactors.
Error: counterfactors Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Maybe they are entirely different, and possibly the onlie model of education does not work at all for PrepUp.
Error: onlie Suggestion: one
Sentence: The online system may be just the supplement along with an offline system and that might be a possible way TopPreparation increased its enrolment in online classes and increased the profits.
Error: enrolment Suggestion: enrollment
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not really. need to argue the conclusion always:
In order to address these issues of profitability in the coming year, PrepUp will begin offering online test prep courses.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 490 350
No. of Characters: 2529 1500
No. of Different Words: 226 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.705 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.161 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.922 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 201 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 145 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.555 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.307 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, so, then, while, for instance, more or less, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2584.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 490.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27346938776 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98827083761 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477551020408 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 828.9 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6933344306 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.2 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116504567567 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0410474798477 0.0743258471296 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035423700309 0.0701772020484 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0655271621324 0.128457276422 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395345567748 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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