The letter propose the consumers refuse to buy Crust copper company (CCC)'s products unless the company abandon its mining plan on West Fredonia, a home of several endangered animal species, in order to prevent West Fredonia form natural disasters. such a suggestion is based on the fact that mining copper on West Fredonia ineluctantly result pollutions and that consumers' purchasing power can create great pressure on CCC to change the company's strategy. However, these two assumptions are filled with holes. Before rushing into conclusions, we need to answer at least three questions to better understand the picture.
The letter propose the consumers refuse to buy Crust copper company (CCC)'s products unless the company abandon its mining plan on West Fredonia, a home of several endangered animal species, in order to prevent West Fredonia form natural disasters. such a suggestion is based on the fact that mining copper on West Fredonia ineluctantly result pollutions and that consumers' purchasing power can create great pressure on CCC to change the company's strategy. However, these two assumptions are filled with holes. Before rushing into conclusions, we need to answer at least three questions to better understand the picture.
Firstly, does the mining activity by CCC actually create unbearable negative influence for West Fredonia? The author of the letter prematurely assumes that CCC's purchasing of the land is bonded with future disasters for West Fredonia, which may not be true. Since the nature has its remarkable self-curing power, moderate resource exploration with scientific standards can even be a good thing for our environment. if the mining activities are conducted in nonpopulated areas where seldom animals inhabit, CCC could do little harm to the natural environment. The pollution that brought by mining activities may also be within limits if taken good care of. Thus, without understanding the degree of harm, the assumption that mining copper will create natural disasters does not hold water.
Secondly, is it realistic to rely on consumers to pressure CCC to change their mining plan? In other words, do consumers have enough incentive to refuse to buy CCC's product? The answer to this question is likely to be 'no' due to multiple possibilities. The consumers may have little room to choose products made by copper, which leave them with no choice but to use CCC's products. further, even if the consumers have much purchasing power, the majority of them may not care about protecting environment and therefore results in little pressure on CCC. if the assumptions above are true, then the argument will be significantly weakened.
Lastly, even if the consumers generate enough pressure for CCC, how much possible could CCC abandon its mining plans? As we are told by the letter, CCC has already bought over 10,000 square miles of land in West Fredonia and therefore it inevitably bears a significant transition cost. such a great cost can prevent CCC to change its business plan even under threatening situations. if that's true, then little can we do to stop CCC's mining activities.
In conclusion, the letter's argument does not hold unless further investigation and research are done. we need to understand the detailed situation of CCC's mining plan, West Fredonia's situation and consumers' background based on reliable research. Only then can we fully evaluate the proprosing recommendation in a fair and robust way.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 455 350
No. of Characters: 2339 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.619 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.141 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.731 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 182 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.438 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.487 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.145 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'proposes'.
Suggestion: proposes
The letter propose the consumers refuse to buy Crust coppe...
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Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Such
...t West Fredonia form natural disasters. such a suggestion is based on the fact that ...
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Line 3, column 416, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...en be a good thing for our environment. if the mining activities are conducted in ...
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Line 5, column 381, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Further
...ith no choice but to use CCCs products. further, even if the consumers have much purcha...
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Line 5, column 552, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...fore results in little pressure on CCC. if the assumptions above are true, then th...
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Line 7, column 287, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Such
...ly bears a significant transition cost. such a great cost can prevent CCC to change ...
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Line 7, column 384, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...plan even under threatening situations. if thats true, then little can we do to st...
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Line 7, column 387, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...n even under threatening situations. if thats true, then little can we do to stop CCC...
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Line 9, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'letters'' or 'letter's'?
Suggestion: letters'; letter's
...ining activities. In conclusion, the letters argument does not hold unless further i...
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Line 9, column 103, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...er investigation and research are done. we need to understand the detailed situati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, at least, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2390.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 455.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25274725275 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79145451891 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520879120879 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.1933046215 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.913043478 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7826086957 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.39130434783 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432938449243 0.218282227539 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11135645625 0.0743258471296 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.161953016954 0.0701772020484 231% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246429359964 0.128457276422 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.177331235514 0.0628817314937 282% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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