The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.
From the day we were born to beyond, we can not avoid being evaluated in all kinds of aspects in various manners. Some parents or teachers tend to use compliments to motivate children while others think a stricter discipline and a higher standard are what a child needs in order to thrive in the future. As we enter the society as an adult employee, again, we become subordinates of leaders of different temperaments, either encouraging ones or pushy ones. Under such a background, the prompt suggests that the encouraging style should be promoted for the good of our society, implying criticisms of one's weaknesses should be avoided. However, I mostly disagree with this argument. In my opinion, negative actions should not go without notice, and praising should not be overwhelmed. The reasons are as follows.
Firstly, attention to misbehaviors brings composite results potentially, often mixed with positive effects. For instance, the well-known 'tiger mom' style education has been proved effective and beneficial to children based on scientific research. According to studies of developmental psychology, the parents who make strict rules with caring attitudes help their children grow up with a sense of strong self-discipline, good learning habits as well as a sociable mind. This finding may derive from the power of appropriate attention to the misbehaviors, correcting negative actions with clear guidance and abundant supports instead of simply ignoring them. Therefore, it is advisable to regulate bad behaviors.
Secondly, too many compliments that deviate from reality can even hamper people's confidence and competence. Imagine a hypothetical child or an employee, who is being praised every day without good reasons. he or she will certainly reach a point when he or she needs to leave the previous educator, care-giver, or employer and move on to the next life stage. At that time, the person will become very discomfit finding out he or she is not that outstanding as previously perceived. In this case, too many compliments is not a cure, but an addictive poison. On the contrary, if a person grows up with restrained praises based on good reasons, one can learn from those feedbacks to grow strengths and fit into the world better.
Praises and criticisms provide feedbacks for people, which in turn creates a reinforcing loop. educators, employers, or parents should not avoid one and overuse the other. We need the power from both sides to derive the best motivations for work and study.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'bore'?
Suggestion: bore
From the day we born to beyond, we can not avoid being evalu...
^^^^
Line 1, column 596, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... of our society, implying criticisms of ones weaknesses should be avoided. However, ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 442, Rule ID: LEARN_NNNNS_ON_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to'?
Suggestion: to
...g self-discipline, good learning habits as well as a sociable mind. this finding m...
^^
Line 3, column 470, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ning habits as well as a sociable mind. this finding may derive from the power of ap...
^^^^
Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to regulate bad behaviors. Secondly, too many compliments that deviate from r...
^^
Line 5, column 208, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...praised every day without good reasons. he or she will certainly reach a point whe...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Praises
...ngths and fit into the world better. praises and criticisms provide feedbacks for pe...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 96, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Educators
...ich in turn creates a reinforcing loop. educators, employers, or parents should not avoid...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 173, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...ld not avoid one and overuse the other. we need the power from both sides to deriv...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, as well as, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 404.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21782178218 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90684705952 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60396039604 0.4932671777 122% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.4238272871 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.380952381 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2380952381 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.21951772744 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136805638293 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0332936216206 0.0831039109588 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435373426575 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0766968722686 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184833936976 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 100.480337079 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.