“Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favoured proposal of the motorists’ lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But last year’s addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. A better alternative is to add a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase.”
The editorial on local newspaper listed above proposes that a new bicycle lane, instead of an additional lane of automobiles, should be added to ease the traffic jams. The proposal is based on roughly two supporting evidence. one is the worsening traffic of a nearby highway, green highway, which was widened last year. The other one is that the residents are keen bicyclists who may use bikes as an alternative to commuting to work. Nevertheless, the two pieces of evidence are filled with holes and false assumptions and thereby can not effectively back up the editorial's main arguement. There are three questions we need to answer before jumping in into conclusions frivilously.
Firstly, does the reason that caused the increased numbers of traffic jams on green highway necessarily be the new road project？It is possible that a highway's traffic condition changed within a year. The worsening traffic may be driven by a higher demand of green highway due to seasonal cycles, in which case, we can not accuse the addition of a road lane to be the root of the problem. For instance, if the city expects tourists in spring and summer, then the traffic of the city tend to bear a higher stress that could be mistakenly taken as the ramification of the new road construction project. Therefore, more investigations behind the problem of green highway need to be done before referencing it as an excuse for not doing the same on blue highway.
Secondly, does green highway and blue highway comparable in this senario？The road condition in green highway can be dramatically different from blue highway's condition, in which case, we should not reference green highway's implications. For example, if green highway is within the suburbs, instead of between the suburbs and the city like blue highway, then same actions on roads could easily lead to different results.
Lastly, are these keen bicyclists willing to bike to work？These bicycle-lovers could just treat riding bikes as a hobby, not a type of transportation tool. The distance between their home and workplace could be more than 6 kilometres, which makes bicyclies nearly impossible to be the commuting tool. In conclusion, we need more systematic research of blue highway's road condition and its nearby risidents' condition before jumping into a robust and reasonable proposal.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1913 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.956 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.76 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.276 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.361 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.143 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 227, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: One
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, lastly, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 383.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09921671018 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90054004381 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514360313316 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3588663528 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.2 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5333333333 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 5.70786347227 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 5.15768463074 19% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296978519719 0.218282227539 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100052735745 0.0743258471296 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713399368471 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.296978519719 0.128457276422 231% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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