Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
The author argues that routinely administering inoculations against cow flu should not be permitted. The basis or reason stated for the following conclusion is that there might be a small possibility of people dying from these inocualtions. The author's arguments seems to be based on unwarranted assumptions. The author should bolster his argument with evidences that are broached in the following paragraphs.
The author fails to quantify the risk of people dying due to this incoulations by using the term "small possibility". Perhaps, the few casualties that were caused by these inoculations were due to those patients having comorbid conditions or they might have been allergic to the vaccinations. In that case more study and survey needs to be conducted by the authorities and regarding the types of people who should not be taking these vaccinations pertaining to the other ailments they have. The author must cite those findings from the studies and surveys rather than advocating against the use of the inoculation which can possibly save a huge number of lives.
Does the inoculations against cow flu remain effective if they are not routinely administered? Perhaps, if the vaccinations are not routinely conducted the inoculation is rendered effete and the individuals are prone to cow flu again. It is also possible that irregular vaccinations might have unwanted pathological effects on the patient's body. Thus the author must researchg regarding the importance of regular vaccinations and cite them to the readers to make a cogent case.
In conclusion, the argument stands weak based on the above reasons. The author must expound evidences regarding the effects the inoculation has due to regular administering and to exactly many people it might be deleterious and the reasons behind those detrimental side effects. Incorporating the above suggested evidences the author can make a cogent case to the readers.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 242, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...f people dying from these inocualtions. The authors arguments seems to be based on ...
^^^
Line 1, column 310, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...to be based on unwarranted assumptions. The author should bolster his argument with...
^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...roached in the following paragraphs. The author fails to quantify the risk of pe...
^^^
Line 3, column 631, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
...gainst the use of the inoculation which can possibly save a huge number of lives. Does th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 347, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...hological effects on the patients body. Thus the author must researchg regarding the...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, regarding, so, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 304.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39802631579 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09919225637 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509868421053 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6862455078 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.4 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2666666667 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.93333333333 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259253823182 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958100362058 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876707724343 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165587959033 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041145814514 0.0628817314937 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 242, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...f people dying from these inocualtions. The authors arguments seems to be based on ...
^^^
Line 1, column 310, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...to be based on unwarranted assumptions. The author should bolster his argument with...
^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...roached in the following paragraphs. The author fails to quantify the risk of pe...
^^^
Line 3, column 631, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
...gainst the use of the inoculation which can possibly save a huge number of lives. Does th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 347, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...hological effects on the patients body. Thus the author must researchg regarding the...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, regarding, so, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 304.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39802631579 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09919225637 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509868421053 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6862455078 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.4 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2666666667 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.93333333333 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259253823182 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958100362058 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876707724343 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165587959033 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041145814514 0.0628817314937 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.