For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses
The shop owner believes that they can reduce their expenses by discontinuing stocking many of their varieties of important cheese. The assumption is that the preference for domestic cheeses is greater than the preference for imported cheese by consumers. Although this assumption and belief may seem logical at a cursory glance, there are many factors to consider before arriving to this conclusion.
The shop owner uses the recent survey by Cheeses of the world magazine to support her assumption that the liking for domestic cheese has increased. However, there are many factors to consider in this survey. Firstly, the sample size of its subscribers is not mentioned. This is important as the magnitude of subscribers that took part in this survey will have an impact on the validity of the study. The larger the number, the more generalizable the study will be. Further, this is a survey done by the world magazine and it does not mention where their subscribers are from, this is concerning as preferences for food items can change across individuals from different parts of the world. Further, the survey also states that there is an increasing preference for domestic cheeses, there is a possibility that what is considered "imported cheese" in the shop is considered as domestic cheese where it is produced. Consumers may not prefer a cheese purely because it is domestic. Other Factors such as quality, texture and price are considered as well.
Secondly, the shop owner argues that the fact that the five best-selling cheeses at their newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin could support her belief in discontinuing the storing of foreign cheese. However, this can be considered as fallacious as there are many factors to consider. For example, the owner states that the five best selling cheeses were domestic at their newest store. What about their old stores? It is not logical to completely discontiue imported cheeses in all stores if the five best selling cheeses were domestic solely at their newest store. For example, there are many factors to conscider such as the location of the store, the new store could be located in a less developed city, making it economically irrational for consumers to purchases foreign imports which are likely to be higher as opposed to consumers from more developed cities where they are able to afford imported cheese.
Lastly, it is not guaranteed that discontinuing imported cheese stocks in all the stores will improve profits in all of their stores for many reasons. Such as, what is the proportion of inventory cost compared to total costs? If the cost is generally less than any other cost, this is unlikely to improve profits.The shop owner should also consider the opportunity cost of discontinuing the imported cheese. As mentioned earlier, they must conscider the top 5 best selling cheese in all other stores as well. If there are imported cheeses among the top 5 best selling cheeses then discontinuing imported stocks will be costly to the shop.
Hence in conclusion, the shop owners' argument and belief can be considered fallacious and lacks proper analysis if other factors such as those mentioned above are not considered.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 624 350
No. of Characters: 3130 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.998 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.016 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.638 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 242 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 179 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 116 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 71 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.99 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.679 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.406 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...d imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest...
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Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s of important cheese. The assumption is that the preference for domestic cheeses...
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Line 4, column 582, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... where their subscribers are from, this is concerning as preferences for food items can chang...
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Line 6, column 791, Rule ID: FOREIGN_IMPORT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'imports'.
Suggestion: imports
...y irrational for consumers to purchases foreign imports which are likely to be higher as oppose...
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Line 6, column 837, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...n imports which are likely to be higher as opposed to consumers from more develope...
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Line 7, column 314, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...st, this is unlikely to improve profits.The shop owner should also consider the opp...
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Line 7, column 510, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ing cheese in all other stores as well. If there are imported cheeses among the to...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ed stocks will be costly to the shop. Hence in conclusion, the shop owners argument...
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Line 8, column 180, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ose mentioned above are not considered.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.6327345309 194% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3210.0 2260.96107784 142% => OK
No of words: 623.0 441.139720559 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15248796148 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.99599519102 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74519347747 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.375601926164 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1011.6 705.55239521 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.4561935541 57.8364921388 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.888888889 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0740740741 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07407407407 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.540231578549 0.218282227539 247% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176357474757 0.0743258471296 237% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.185766877041 0.0701772020484 265% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.297891503487 0.128457276422 232% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.243577695832 0.0628817314937 387% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 98.500998004 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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