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The statement states that the best way for a society in preparation of its young population for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling them a sense of cooperation and not competition. However, sometimes competition is also crucial because when competing with someone we tend to give our 100 per cent. I strongly agree with the speaker's claim. My proclivity towards the same has been explained along with relevant examples in the ensuing paragraphs.
The primary reason as why cooperation is better than competition is a simple notion that 2 minds are better than 1. For example if 100 workers are working in an industry and some fault occurs in the machine while production, instead of one person trying to find the solution to the problem it will be better if all the 100 workers used their brains to tackle that particular problem in the machine. It will result in an increase in efficiency. Another example I would like to give that if suppose a meeting is being held at a company, then cooperation is must because the members of the meeting do not cooperate, it will lead to difference in opinion and thus no action will take place.
The second reason as to why cooperation is preferred than competition is mainly because leadership comes by acting together, working together, not single headedly approaching an issue. People will choose a leader that listens to them and cooperates; they will not choose someone who is arrogant and haughty.
But, there may be some cases where competition is necessary. For example, it is natural that no human likes to lose a battle or competition; everyone wants to win, to be the champion. So competition motivates people in giving their 100 per cent effort.
To sum it all, I strongly agree with the speaker's claim. Cooperation is the best way to prepare the young people for leadership in government, industry and many other fields.
While it may be true that Super Screen should allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the common people through advertising, this author's argument does not make a cogent case for increasing the viewers. It is easy to understand why Super Screen should advertise more, but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions and thus, not strong enough to lead to allocating a greater share of budget next year to advertising.
The author states that fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies past year than any other year. This may be because of the increased ticket prices than the last year, people do not want to pay so much for watching these movies, rather they would sit back home and relax watching the movie on television when it will air. This explanation undermines the author's claim.
Another assertion made by the author is the percentage of positive of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. This might have happened because the viewers had streamed the movie online where they wish to pause, play rewind or forward the movie anytime they want. This also undermines the author's claim.
The author also assumes that the contents of the reviews are not reaching enough to the public. The author might be wrong as the reviews are posted online where anybody can see them.
If a survey had been conducted to know the main reason why people are not attending the Super Screen movies and the people would have replied due to lack of awareness then only the author's claim to share its budget to advertising might hold true. Thus, there is lack of evidence to support the author's claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 23, column 56, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'of positive'.
Suggestion: of positive
...on made by the author is the percentage of positive of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specif...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, second, so, still, then, thus, while, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3032.0 2260.96107784 134% => OK
No of words: 614.0 441.139720559 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93811074919 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.977853291 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55098151913 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 204.123752495 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475570032573 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 923.4 705.55239521 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 4.96107784431 262% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.5490799296 57.8364921388 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.296296296 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7407407407 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.51851851852 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 5.15768463074 194% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.20758483034 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.218282227539 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0743258471296 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.128457276422 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 98.500998004 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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