One year ago, Glengood Health Center in Turnville decided to start a health awareness program for its community. Since that time, Glenwood's share of patients in the Turnville area has significantly increased. Further, a nationwide survey indicates that many people in the country are greatly interested in such awareness programs. Citing these facts, the director of Carson Health Center in Poway has recommended that Carson should also start health awareness programs of its own to attract more patients from its community.
The argument states that to increase the number of patients in Carson Health Centre, it should start health awareness programs. The argument at first glance seems plausible, however on scrupulous analysis, it is found to be rife with holes and assumptions. A valid stand can be taken on this argument only after the evidence required to evaluate the argument is thoroughly analyzed.
The author claims that since starting the health awareness programs, the number of patients have increased in Glengood Health Centre. The question that needs to be answered is whether the awareness programs are the only reason for the increase in patients? It is entirely possible that the area of Turnville has the outbreak of a disease which leads to the increased number of patients in Glengood. What is the actual number of patients going to Glengood as compared to one year ago? There is a possibility that there have been only 5 more patients than there were one year ago.
Furthermore, we need to answer the question whether people in Turnville are visiting the Glengood Health Centre for their ailments or for the awareness programs. If the number of people visiting the centre for awareness programs is greater, then the reasoning seems dubious. Without numerical evidence, this fallacy cannot be resolved.
Moreover, the author also states that the nationwide survey indicates that many people in the country are greatly interested in such awareness programs. What is the credibility of the survey? What is the sample size of the survey? If the survey is taken by people doing it for a hobby, it may not be an accurate representation of what the people want. Without the sample size of the survey, we can successfully determine if the survey would be applicable to Carson. If there are no people surveyed in Poway, the survey would not be applicable in Poway. There is a possibility that residents of Poway are not interest in health awareness programs at all.
The argument consists of weak ideas, mixed issues and equivocal claims due to the flaws mentioned above in the line of reasoning. There is a possibility that Carson Health Centre can attract more patients because of the health awareness programs, but the reasoning given is rife with flaws and inaccuracies. Therefore, it is extremely important to find the evidences that support the claims of the author. And only after finding the evidences, the following topic can be strengthened.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 405 350
No. of Characters: 1995 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.486 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.926 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.619 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.409 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.549 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.409 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.55 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.141 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 32, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
.... Furthermore, we need to answer the question whether people in Turnville are visiting the Gl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 405.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0962962963 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71296794898 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441975308642 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 640.8 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3346749836 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8181818182 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4090909091 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54545454545 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312299373917 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0935901893684 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821766198252 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167494842508 0.128457276422 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0990071378063 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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