The reading fragment is about comparison of Parson City and Blue City in the region of Trillura using amounts of this cities taxes directed to the increase of public education’s quality. The author asserts that Parson City’s government invests more money in to the development of the public education that the Blue City does. However, the argument he presents is not strong enough to buttress the proceded conclution. I would illustrate my position through discussion three major evidencies which are needed to make the argument clear: the statistical plot with distribution of taxes between different public areas, year-by-year changes in the government fundings, number of students in every town.
First of all, the assumption that Parson city place a higher value on providing a good education seems obscure because of the lack of statistical data of differencies in budget distrebution amoung different needs in this towns. From the author’s arguments we could state that the only thing that different in this cities is a government funding of the city-run public schools. However, It’s important to take in accout whole situation of taxes’ dispensation, and statistical data whould be crucial to support or refute the evidence. In other words, the situation may be that the Blue city government have more spheres which under their funding and, for example, the Blue cite in comparisom with the Parson city may have wider range of public services for suppirting with taxes, such as retirement centres, kindergardens, more broad network of public transportation, so it has to distribute taxes approximatly in the same amounts between all this demanded areas. Consecuantly, the comprehensive information about whole taxes dispensation is needed for analizing the situation with city-run schools and making a correct assumption.
Second, it’s hard to corroborate the main assumption before understanding the decrease or increase in government funding during a couple of years, and the author doesn’t provide any information how many years he took in accout while he was making a letter in a local newspapper. The proper represantation of year-by-year changes in tax revenues in plot will provide an solid proof of tendencies in private schools’s fundings. Besides, the amount of the taxes’ revenuers i the Blue City may grow up year be year, when the amount of the Parson City taxes spent of schools may decline at the same time. Consecuantly, the Parson city still amy spend more money on the supportion of the public schools, but the year by year tendency will illustrate the overall decline, on the other hand the sutiation could be antithetical. Correspondingly, the cogent assumption needs more numbers of year by year changes in the government funding.
Finally, the author claims that the number of residents approximatly similar in this two towns, but this statement isn’t a proof that the number of students in the same. The schools in the Person City just may have more students enrolled in schools, than in the Blue city, so that’s why the funding in the Pascon city would be bigger that in the Blue city. Therefore, for solid proof for the assumption and The person city care more for the quality of education, we need to know is there any differencies in the quanities of students per schoold or not. The statistics that will provide that the number of students in the same will strengthen the author’s conclusion.
To recapitulate, various avenues are left unexplored in the newpapper letter, without which the conclusion seems feeble. It would be wise to address those areas prior to setting any firm conclution on the matter.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The reading fragment is about comparison of Parson City and Blue City in the region of Trillura using amounts of this cities taxes directed to the increase of public education's quality.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and cities
Sentence: However, the argument he presents is not strong enough to buttress the proceded conclution.
Error: conclution Suggestion: conclusion
Error: proceded Suggestion: proceed
Sentence: I would illustrate my position through discussion three major evidencies which are needed to make the argument clear: the statistical plot with distribution of taxes between different public areas, year-by-year changes in the government fundings, number of students in every town.
Error: evidencies Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: First of all, the assumption that Parson city place a higher value on providing a good education seems obscure because of the lack of statistical data of differencies in budget distrebution amoung different needs in this towns.
Error: amoung Suggestion: among
Error: distrebution Suggestion: distribution
Error: differencies Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However, It's important to take in accout whole situation of taxes' dispensation, and statistical data whould be crucial to support or refute the evidence.
Error: accout Suggestion: account
Error: whould Suggestion: would
Sentence: In other words, the situation may be that the Blue city government have more spheres which under their funding and, for example, the Blue cite in comparisom with the Parson city may have wider range of public services for suppirting with taxes, such as retirement centres, kindergardens, more broad network of public transportation, so it has to distribute taxes approximatly in the same amounts between all this demanded areas.
Error: suppirting Suggestion: supporting
Error: approximatly Suggestion: approximately
Error: kindergardens Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: comparisom Suggestion: comparison
Sentence: Second, it's hard to corroborate the main assumption before understanding the decrease or increase in government funding during a couple of years, and the author doesn't provide any information how many years he took in accout while he was making a letter in a local newspapper.
Error: newspapper Suggestion: newspaper
Error: accout Suggestion: account
Sentence: The proper represantation of year-by-year changes in tax revenues in plot will provide an solid proof of tendencies in private schools's fundings.
Error: represantation Suggestion: representation
Sentence: Consecuantly, the Parson city still amy spend more money on the supportion of the public schools, but the year by year tendency will illustrate the overall decline, on the other hand the sutiation could be antithetical.
Error: amy Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: sutiation Suggestion: station
Error: supportion Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Finally, the author claims that the number of residents approximatly similar in this two towns, but this statement isn't a proof that the number of students in the same.
Error: approximatly Suggestion: approximately
Sentence: Therefore, for solid proof for the assumption and The person city care more for the quality of education, we need to know is there any differencies in the quanities of students per schoold or not.
Error: differencies Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: quanities Suggestion: qualities
Error: schoold Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: To recapitulate, various avenues are left unexplored in the newpapper letter, without which the conclusion seems feeble.
Error: newpapper Suggestion: newspaper
Sentence: It would be wise to address those areas prior to setting any firm conclution on the matter.
Error: conclution Suggestion: conclusion
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argument 1 -- not exactly
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 20 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 594 350
No. of Characters: 2992 1500
No. of Different Words: 264 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.937 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.037 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.799 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 215 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 160 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 108 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 79 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.775 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.34 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.561 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 114, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...the region of Trillura using amounts of this cities taxes directed to the increase o...
^^^^
Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... distrebution amoung different needs in this towns. From the author's arguments...
^^^^
Line 3, column 315, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...e that the only thing that different in this cities is a government funding of the c...
^^^^
Line 5, column 377, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...es in tax revenues in plot will provide an solid proof of tendencies in private sc...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, then, therefore, while, as to, for example, such as, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 92.0 55.5748502994 166% => OK
Nominalization: 37.0 16.3942115768 226% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3123.0 2260.96107784 138% => OK
No of words: 592.0 441.139720559 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27533783784 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93265142912 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01081898002 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 204.123752495 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472972972973 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 951.3 705.55239521 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.1125638272 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.15 119.503703932 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6 23.324526521 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35 5.70786347227 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335888866374 0.218282227539 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112843189697 0.0743258471296 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887578210258 0.0701772020484 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186653419849 0.128457276422 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107924965806 0.0628817314937 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.3799401198 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 98.500998004 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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