There has been much discussion around the topic of whether the successful people tend to take more risks or not. Of couse there are some qualities which define whether a person achive success or not. However, in my preference, I eager to say that possibility to taking risks and fearless in front of the new experience is the most important ones. I will explain my point of view by providing several examples.
First of all, exploring new horizonts can help a person to implement new ideas and develope further. Speaking personally, I met a lot of people in the scientific world who was always trying to do their best in investigations. For example, one of my colleages was studying molecular mechanisms of the cell death, and somehow, he got stucked in the middle of the project, because he wasn’t able to process the acquired data. Thus, he willingly decided to go to the special courses for improving his skill in the computer data. In the light of the above, I gather to say that he successfuly complite his project, because he was’t afraid to invest labor and time to the development of the skill which is significant for his job.
Secondly, I suppose that success of some businessmen depends on their ability to take risky decisions. This statement could be supported by some statistics I have seen recently. There was made an investigation in one journal, which compair different milliarders’ career and how they achive success in the business. And it was shown that most of them turned their career upside down by making risky decisions. They were gambling with the fortune and this brought its own fruits. Just to mention Stiven Jobs who made a lot of extremely important decisions on which his and his colleages carrer depended on.
To wrap up, there is no doubts that we can identify million of qualities by which we can recognize successful people. And, of course, eager for risks and adventures are qualities which defenetly define a lucky person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'there are no doubts'?
Suggestion: there are no doubts
...ges carrer depended on. To wrap up, there is no doubts that we can identify million of qualiti...
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Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
...there is no doubts that we can identify million of qualities by which we can recognize ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, i suppose, no doubt, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89020771513 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78394899747 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566765578635 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1369700174 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9411764706 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8235294118 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11003515306 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0353794885307 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345662960959 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0605077104809 0.150856017488 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239838499001 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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