Job takes usually about 8 hours of a person’s life every day. Therefore, everyone desire to do satisfying and captivating tasks during this hours, but unfortunatly it isn’t always possible to do. Speaking personally, I would definitely agree with the point that if it is possible to master your personal skills and after that get your favorite job, person should do it , whatever it will cost him or her. I will explain my position providing several example to support my point of view.
At the first place, there is no doubts that secure job make you feel comfortable but, at the same time, this comfort make you stuck at one place without any improvement in your work skills. In other words, It is hard to increase your skills when you are already in the good position, and your concious doesn’t want to leave it. This stagnant position sometimes makes a person feel weak and unable to change something, for example to get a perfect job with high salery. For example, one of my friend was working as a manager for 20 years, while he want to be a businessman. The misleading feeling of comfort restricts him from doing some decisive steps, and at the end he wasn’t able to leave his comfort zone at all.
Secondy, It is obvious that a person will gain more success on the satisfying job than on secure one. He will be extremely concentrated and will be able to get so much satisfacion from positive results that these will move him forward with big velocity. I suppose that working hard is worth to get a perfect job, and that the secure one will be like a capture for our mind and brain. For instatnce, I was working in the Pharmacy for a long time and earning a good salary but it wasn’t enough for me at all, and during this period I have started to practice my english skills and red a lot of scientific articles, because I want to go to study abroad. This goal is preferable to me, because I totally sure that it will open to me a lot of perspective in the future.
To wrap up, satisfying job is a key for people’s success, and it’s a bad decision to stop on the sucure job without career and personal growth.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, i suppose, no doubt, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5501285347 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62701786817 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54498714653 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.7135796337 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9333333333 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196619968505 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708752068932 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466644837589 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124098784364 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165258212326 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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