TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

Education is a process which is keeping in pace with the technologies. Therefore, educational system is adapting to the new conditions and new possible distractions that students can have in a class. Frankly speaking, I will disagree with that statement that educating children has become an ardous work to do. I will reinforce my opinion with the several examples.

First of all, technologies can be not only bad distractions or bad habits to children but also can be used in class for presenting an educational information. In order to see the point clearly, I will give an example from my personal experience. When I was at school, there were presented interactive computer boards in most of the classes, where, for instanse, a student can draw, make calculations or present some homework material. Moreove, our history teacher used this interactive board to describe some main historical battles step by step with illustrations and video materials. I daresay, that such material presentation such as visual, sound and written representation dramaticaly increases student’s understanding of the subject. Consequently, technologies can be useful in classes and can attract students attantion more easely and ease the work of a teacher.

Second,social web sites is one of the ways where teachers can benefit if they use it wisely. Just ot mention some online platforms with courses on academic topics. This plaforms has a lot of visitors and users today, and its are a good example of thoughtful managing of the educational information and presenting it with interesting quizes and sometimes even games. Of course, children nowadays are paying a planty of attantion of such dustraction as online games. However, teachers tend to remake their material and present it online in form of online game on the online platform. In the lights of above, everyone benefits from such novel educational system.

To recapitulate, I ween that innovative technologies such as cell phone with all the variety of applications on it will be used by teachers as an interactive format of education and that cell phones will benefit out needs better by improving our education and broadening our knowledge.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: battles'; battle's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, frankly, however, if, second, so, therefore, of course, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1849.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26780626781 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11729085794 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578347578348 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.168723755 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.764705882 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6470588235 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150824798216 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511854472113 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041318349816 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102844675094 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04423589643 0.0645574589148 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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