Over the last 5 seasons Dallas Cowboys have won 17 out of 21 games against their bitter rivals the Washington Redskins Hence they are sure to make a clean sweep of this season as well | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Over the last 5 seasons, Dallas Cowboys have won 17 out of 21 games against their bitter rivals, the Washington Redskins. Hence, they are sure to make a clean sweep of this season as well.

The author's conclusion from his premises and his assumptions are rife with inaccuracies and fallacies, which can be used to weaken his argument.
The author states that the Dallas Cowboys (the Cowboys) have won 17 out of 21 games over the last 5 seasons, but hasn't mentioned if these wins are for every season or for a total of 5 seasons. If the wins are for a total of 5 seasons, then the win ratio isn't very impressive and does not warrant the author's assumption that they will win the full season this year. Additionally, the author hasn't mentioned how many games make up a season; if the number of games in a season are far more than 21, such as 40 to 50 games, then the win ratio of 17:21 isn't satisfactory and certainly isn't enough to validate the author's assumptions of the Cowboys's winning capacity.
The author's conclusion, that given the track record of the DC team over the last 5 seasons, they are sure to win this full season is a logical fallacy, known as 'The Hot Hand Fallacy' in basketball. Just because the team may have shown a good record over the last few seasons, it doesn't necessarily mean that the team would do better this year. There may be several factors which worked in the team's favour to get the wins, such as a good coach, a good strategist who came up with impressive plays to confound the other teams, good players who could be trusted to carry the play successfully, etc. Also, the author seems to assume that the Washington Redskins (the Redskins) team is the only other team of the same calibre as the Cowboys, whereas there could be many other teams playing for the win too. New teams could have entered which show great promise, as well as old teams revamping themselves to beat the Cowboys.
Also, the author assumes that a good win record over only 5 seasons is enough to convince anyone that the Cowboys would make a clean sweep of this season. However, we have no information of their track record in earlier seasons. It is possible that the team got a new coach, new manager, new players which propelled them to success in the last 5 seasons and if some of them have left the team this season, it is certainly possible that the team is weakened and may not win against Redskins or the other teams.
Hence, we observe that evidence that the author has provided for supporting his claim that the Cowboys team would make a clean sweep of this season, based on them winning 17 out of 21 games against Redskins over the last 5 seasons, is not sufficient to validate his claims, and needs to be reexamined. Further specific details are needed in order to make a convincing case for the author's argument.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...order to make a convincing case for the authors argument.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, well, whereas, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 479.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51983298539 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38021461462 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.434237995825 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 641.7 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.59920159681 81% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.3217097143 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.642857143 119.503703932 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.2142857143 23.324526521 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314374893642 0.218282227539 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120427259949 0.0743258471296 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100706212175 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175926522295 0.128457276422 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104076281651 0.0628817314937 166% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.35 48.3550499002 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.53 12.5979740519 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, well, whereas, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments